You took without asking
If it was ok
Over my childlike innocence
You held sway
Would it be different
If it happened today?
You committed the sin
Why do I pay?
You spattered my snow
with red spray -
Now what can I do
how can I play?
The tears turn to ice
this cold day
The rest of my life
in disarray.
I can't give it back
The burden will stay
Not that you would take it
away anyway
So I must dream
of this nightmare betray
and you get off
on the memory everyday
Survival is hard
But then so is dismay
A contest entry
- Surviving..... by Lil-Bit Crazy.
900 points, ended May 22, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Powerful and very touching poem!
"I can't give it back
The burden will stay"
"you committed the sin
why do I pay?"
Great job!!
congrats on the gold
darlintlc
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wow..... so very true... sometimes i think surviving was stupid... i mean if i didnt survive and there was a heaven id be there now.... not stuck here in hell.. so is it really good to survive i think not..! anyway.. great write... thanks for sharing... good luck in contest...
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Well you rocked it for me and I mean that with the utmost respect!! A very incredible and heart wrenching piece.....
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