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I Lost Myself to the Walls of White

I wake, only to find I’m locked up again
Solitary confinement in the room with white walls.
I’m running out of reasons, and I’m running out of passions.
I’m running short on any sort of individual action.
I can’t engage the thoughts that used to be profound
They just revolve, round and round
The seamless walls, the seamless days
The seamless, dreamless, endless ways.

It’s just I found out recently that I’m not always happy.

Because sometimes a smile comes on the verge of tears
And sometimes I lose myself in the weight of my fears.
Sometimes a laugh hurts more than the shadows
And sometimes I’m alone in a place choked and hollow.
The room with white walls leaves nowhere to hide
I can’t find the words to ask you to save me and my mind.
Because I need you today and I’ll need you more tomorrow.
It’s just I’m not as strong as I thought I was;
I’ve fallen.

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  • hotpinkblossomluv
    May 22, 2008
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    Ohriginality, you do know what filler words are, I presume?


    • madgirlslovesong
      May 22, 2008
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      Um, yes. What I meant was, can you give me an example of when I used some in this poem? Because I am not clear what filler parts you are referencing.

  • hotpinkblossomluv
    May 22, 2008

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    This was a nice poem, but my suggestion to you is that you refrain from using so many filler words. Overall, it was good. Thank you for your entry.