September's sky
wept humans
we struggle to follow
our
rain digs
for ocean-buried
tears.
Author notes
Edits: 5
A contest entry
- 15 words by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended May 22, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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5 edits huh, you are better than me.
for me there is sadness here.
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a very interesting piece.
love the first three lines the most.
keep sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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Wow, there's so much to contemplate in this little jewel ... lot of avenues of understanding to explore
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Very interesting.... I really liked this one... Very good short write. Much said.
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I dig rain digs.
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Beautifully written! I can't quite find anything about it that's poorly done or whatnot; good work!
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Since i live at the ocean i could see this one... beautiful weave of nature and the human "condition" here, Kate - as always.
~ Nicolette
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