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pain

Inside your heart
What do you feel?
Broken or shattered,
Devastated
What is love?
Pain

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15 words

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  • reeseXtheXsoldier
    May 23, 2008

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    damn!

    you are so simple, but so precise! i love it! KUDOS! if i weren't point poor I'd give you 3 clapping smiley faces!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    Because it is such a short piece I believe it make have worked a bit better without it written in question form -

    but I appreciate the emotion you did write with.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 21, 2008

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    Pain=Love... Love=Pain.. how can two things which seem so different be exactly the same. Lovely write, there is a lot of emotion packed into it.


  • Perception
    May 21, 2008

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    Pain does have a lot to do with love. I think they are on the same... Spectrum... Perhaps. I like what you did here in only 15 words... Very emotional.. Good write

  • Judith Chandler
    May 21, 2008

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    A good take on this 15-word contest. I can certainly relate to the devastation of a love gone wrong.

    Good luck in this contest.


  • Lonely Christina
    May 21, 2008

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    this is great amy! love you wifey
    christina

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