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Live (Acrostic)

Life's too short.
It’s what you make of it.
Violence is wrong.
Each day's precious.


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We spend too much time worrying and not enough time doing! Get off your butt and get started with your life.
Acrostic (LIVE)
Prompt: Anything (15 words)

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  • Valley Girl silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    A fantastic take on live. It is so true, we spend all of our time worrying, that sometimes we miss the greatest joys in life. Great write.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    Life is too short, if more people had this idea the world would be a better place to live.

    Nicely done.


  • PatheticKt
    May 22, 2008

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    True, indeed
    I'm lazy, though but maybe I'll do something worthy while I'm still breathing
    Anyway, good write and the acrostic was a lovely touch ^^


  • Tattboyspet
    May 22, 2008

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    So true ... people don't tend to see it though
    lovely short acrostic that spoke volumes


  • Perception
    May 21, 2008

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    Excellent write. Though I'm not a fan of acrostics, I thought this one was rather good. I thought it was a bit fragmented... Though good


    • KayJay
      May 21, 2008
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      It's a dud (LOL). I don't know what the heck I was thinking... but it's there and since I even rescue spiders in the house, I guess I'll let it die a natural death Thanks for the honest comment!
      Ken


  • Simply Simple
    May 21, 2008

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    Wiser words are rarely spoke. It was short and to the point. Excellent wording. A work of simple art. Don't change a thing.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 21, 2008
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    More wise words to live by Ken... so very true! I need to do that myself...


  • Lucy.
    May 21, 2008

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    I like all of this, and think it's all clever, except for the V bit. Not that I don't like it, but it seems too 'common' amongst the rest of it. Something different, I feel, could make the whole thing more 'profound' (for want of a better word). I would prefer something like 'value every moment'. It keeps it all on the same lines and the same message of seizing the day....well, of your title, 'Live'. The violence bit just seems like an interruption to this message, to me anyway.
    My humble opinion, take it or leave it, and good luck in the contest!


  • aeolia
    May 21, 2008

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    "Life's to short" -- should be "too."
    It's a good idea, but it feels lacking due to the lack of poetic devices. Then again, I hate acrostics; too often, they read like lists, as this one does.

    --Cristina

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