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She said she loved me.

Love,
What she claimed in beginning
I believed,
But she said it was a lie.

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  • onehundredpercent
    April 10

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    This was so powerful for such a short poem.
    I really enjoyed this and felt what you felt - I've so often been in this position before!
    Keep writing
    Harriet


  • Samcat
    May 22, 2008
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    Wow this is pretty powerful evevn in just 4 lines!
    Well done!
    x


  • Perception
    May 21, 2008

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    Hm... This holds a deeper story behind it.. I can just feel it. I wish there was something leading on to that however -- you just kinda leave me hangin..

    However good
    Nice write

  • phoenixonfire
    May 21, 2008

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    thats a painful expression here and it comes out as someone relating a sad part of their life! Good..! Thanks for entering and good luck!
    pri