The day you left us all the earth stood still
The birds stopped singing
The flowers wouldn’t bloom
The pain inside wouldn’t stop ringing
Why did you have to leave us,
At an age much to young to die
As I think about it all,
I can’t help but start to cry
So many whom were affected by your death
Mourned at your grave
Now all we can do is pray
You had timed to get saved
I often wonder if you are in heaven
Watching from above
All the people that cared for you,
And the one you truly love
Much time has passed
This doesn’t seem real
I’m living in a nightmare,
And my heart won’t heal
Now the earth spins slower
The birds songs are darker
The flowers are all gray
Around your death marker
Author notes
Have you ever lost a friend or your true love to suicide? If you haven't there is no way you can possible understand the pain involved. It hurts so badly. you feel responsible and hopeless. All i want is to hear him say smile one more time and to hold him in my arms and feel one last hug, one last kiss, and i really wish i could tell him i love him
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im so sorry for your loss. very good poem though i like it. thank you for entering
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A beautifully sad piece, but it seems to stay an the ABCB scheme the whole way through, unless I am missing something, and doesn't meet the contest parameters.
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Nice rhyming in this poem and the topic is sad, but nevertheless a good poem. It definitely captures how bleak the world feels when someone close to you dies especially at a young age. Best of luck!
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ouch. emotions, emotions, emotions. excellent. i can 100 percent tell that this is personal. and that's what i'm looking for. very nice job and thank you for entering.
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I'm very sorry for your loss. A close one commiting suicide is never easy, and it does change a persons perspective of things. It is a very good write, and I wish you luck in my contest =]
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The pain is very obvious. And, the scenes you paint in the words earth spins slower, the birds songs are darker, the flowers are all gray, around your death marker, tell the story. This poem is quite emotional and tugs at the heart.
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Thanx. like i said this is the first poem I wrote after CJ death. I was relaizing the small things in life and how one person's death greatly affected many. This is why I wrote the lines I wrote. My pain was strong and I didn't know how to express them.
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This is the first Poem I wrote after CJ, my bf committed suicide. It kind of says it all. ALl my emotions were bottled up and this was just the start of some great therapy. He meant the world to me, a nd nothing seemed the same after he died. this is why imentioned the small things that changed
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