Trickling streams of scarlet,
reveal what I feel inside
Trickling streams of scarlet,
Show what I've been trying to hide.
Trying so hard,
But now my secrets are out,
trying so hard,
as I let out a shout.
It fills me with anger,
why can't I succeed?
It fills me with anger,
all I can do is bleed.
Now I'm a failure,
Should I give up on life?
Now I'm a failure,
Should I just grab the knife?
Then it comes to me,
What if what if,
Then it comes to me,
What if? What if?
What if
I'm such a failure,
What if
I can't succeed?
What if
I give it everything,
What if
It's not enough?
I give it my all,
Buts its not good enough.
I give it my all,
My body's just too tough.
I cannot succeed.
I tried so hard.
I cannot succeed,
did I try to hard?
I guess I'm such a failure,
I can't succeed in taking my own life,
I guess I'm such a failure,
I'll try again with the knife.
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Your words really cut right through me in a good way made me realize just how I feel. amazing write your poem speaks volumes and is indeed in depth with so much emotion
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Wow, great use of repetiton. This somewhat had the style of a sonnet. I really like how expressive you were with this.
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This is deep, in a good way. I like this poem, it is good. Really good. Screaming emotion, and I love that in a poem. Good job!!!!!!
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This poem is very emotional and I think that is its strength. Such a hard concept as well and you captured the feelings of hoplessness and "powerlessness" very well, it's just that simple sometimes with simple words. GREAT!!
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Intense. Thank you so much for the poem and for contributing in the group poem. This was really great.
Much Love
Carrie
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