you speak from that hedge
where vines ripple
with wind
outside in the night
long, leafy tongues sing
in your mouth, and in my body
I hear you
like dew, I fall,
completely,
heartlong into the jasmine
of your voice
Author notes
your voice, your voice...
Persian yasmin, i.e. "gift from God"
In a list
- Beautiful Words by Beautiful People I Know • next in list
- Bookmarked Beauties • next in list
- a vase of flowers • next in list
A contest entry
- PIF - three of my favorite things by tara wilson.
1200 points, ended May 22, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From May 2008 by amaranthine lover.
900 points, ended July 1, 2008, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I am just re-reading the scent of this beautiful piece.
As always, you take my breath away.
Thanks for sharing
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Be still my heart...
you are an amazing poet with such soft and beautiful poetry.This is so heart warming, I cant wait for warm spring nights and the scents of flowers upon the wind
Thanks for the images, best to you in all you do.
Tony
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Very beautiful
I can see why this won trophys. The wording is great and the the story told well. I like thius a lot and hope to read more from you. I'm adding you to my favorites! The Shaker
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Thank you!
This is one of my personal favourites too.
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again
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Computer forgot my clappy dudes
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to fall like dew ...
What romantic sentence that is dear friend.
Yes, I'm back (partially in some kind of way) but I thought it's about time I grab hold of everything I'm still in love with and force myself to enjoy it again.
What beauty you displayed within your written pictures; what grace you carve into your reader's eyes; what joy you bring into my poetic heart - and beyond...
I hope I didn't let you down by not commenting for so long, but I'm making it up with you
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Rich and textured, the longing is palpable.
This is beautiful and makes me long to hear my own lover's voice.
Perfectly penned- artful and a delight to read.
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thank you - this is one of my own favourite poems too
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This is smooth, enchanting, captivating and graceful. Your choice of format enhances an already lovely poem. Of course, Jasmine helps to embrace the romance. I really share the joy with you as I read this poem. (((hugs))).
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- thank you so much for this lovely comment. he does have a voice like this
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There you go again lovely crooner! I am never lost by the beauty of your sweet words
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Thanks, Jeff - you've found one of my own favourites
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Boffo!
From the opening line, you had me.
Congratulations on the contest win.
Tom
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you have the most beautiful voice, liefie...whether it's on paper or in my ear
i never tire of hearing it, or the love you sing with it
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Now this is a great example of what I expect to see in my contests!
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Oh, oh, it's magic, you know. Never believe it's not so!
Oh, wow. That's it. I've found it out: I'm bewitched by your poetry! That's what it is. You've cast a spell and I've fallen in love with your poetry!
Again, beautiful. Again, OF COURSE GOLD! Well done!
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i'm spelled by the soul of yours.
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I know I've commented on this poem before...but I've came back and read it so many times...One of my favorites....just breathtaking
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Enigmatically musical undertones in this fragrant fall into heartspeak " where vines ripple with wind".... It's like breathing a melody that caresses without words, and so softly shimmers inwardly.
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Thank you, dear Karen...loved the "softly shimmers inwardly"
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wow...you are an amazing poet...im becoming a fan..lol this just makes me smile...I think i've read this 10 times now...lol
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an Apt Gold winner for certain.
and indeed-
scented suggestions-
of eloquent voices-
easily steal one's soul-
with but the slightest-
of whispers fragrance-
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this feels like the purest type of poetry- gentle, mature, imagery rich and thought-provoking... and leaving sentimental readers with a longing for a tender moment.
-cassidy
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I scurried over after reading Carol's tribute poem to you. I clicked on a poem, with a double meaning and one that lays dear to my heart "Jasmine" "Jasmine is truly God's gift " to us all. I burn jasmine candles, jasmine incense, and when clients are on my healing table scents gently lull them into trance-like relaxation. Wonder combination of words combing the effect of jasmine and love! Will return to read more. You are like the cleansing morning breeze, laden with all that is beauty. I will learn from you! CArol unknowingly gave me a gift this morning!
LInda
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Carol wrote such a beautiful poem - I was speechless. Thank you for this lovely comment, Linda
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It's been a while since I've been really active on here so I knew I could find some greatness on your page my friend
There's such a soothing touch to this poem, in which you captured and displayed your wonderful talent.
This one asks for a sigh actually...
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I read this as a communion with the One, who is ever present.
The image of leaves being like tongues in the mouth of this largeness to speak of its secrets. Then falling into the intoxication of such presence on 'hearing' it and all being alive in yourself.
A remembrance and return to the Real.
Simple and most beautiful.
Sol
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True!
A poem of elegant, passionate virtuosity, true to its source!
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wow this is utterly gorgeous
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Yes! Gold worthy indeed! I can see hear, feel, and identify with each word written here dear sister/friend. The gentle tone of this poem is soothing to the reader. The voice of one who penetrates our spirit is whispered yet heard in screaming volumes of love and wanton desire. You have all that here with so few lines. Simply Beautiful!
CONGRATULATIONS!
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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this poem is soooooo wonderful and greatly written. I loved how it made me think abou thte guy i am so madly in love with. such a great poem. i felt so warm and fuzzy.
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mmm Nicolette, you always make me sigh with your writes...and fall in love even when you're not.
But what's good now is I am... (lol) and that's make me fall in love even more
and sigh even more...
you're surely are the Goddess of Love in AP...
and jasmine reminds me of the song "Summer Breeze"
mmmm your write combine with the song = magic
Anna Lee
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Aaaah, you're in love - goooood Anna Lee... Thank you, so great to hear from
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OMG UR POEMS R AWSOM
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FINALLY here to comment, taking my sweet time
I'm not surprised that you won gold anyway 
"long, leafy tongues sing
in your mouth," - that was my favourite part; you always sing such beautiful songs within your poetry!
Sighhhh, it should be illegal to be this good! You're one of the only people that is always leaving me speechless so my comments are crap and have nothing relevant to say
Lovelyyyyyyyyy!
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lolol Allyce! I don't mind your "crappy" comments because you write such damn fine poetry. Thank you, dear
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This resonates with quiet passion. once I lived in a place that had night blooming jasmine under my window.
It was nearly as lovely as this poem.
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There are moments when one realizes the true gifts in their lives. They are the moments worth remembering... Love one a blessing so often overlooked within it's softness for it's glossy opposite... lust!!! Beautiful!
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Nearly perfect...if perfection could exist!
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well 'nearly perfect' is good in my book... thank you
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beautiful and well deserved.gave me the chills.you paint such pure images in the reader's mind.
Helen
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Beautiful poem, so emotional, congrats on the gold, you deserved it for this piece.
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When one is quiet they are almost immune to everything. No sound escapes from the already unknown, that much is certain. This reminds me that sometimes poetry has to be sensitive to the reader as well as the writer. Has to have that delicate swish that moves one person to the next. Like a gentle breeze. A few days ago I looked out my bedroom window and all this dew had fallen on the neighbors hedges. It looked like spider webs. Capturing a moment in time is not an easy thing, yet you seem to do it well.
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good job
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superb poetry Nic...
al
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.. thank you, Al
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I have to keep having a stop sign at every other line...
... to feel how each word translates into liveliness completely, Nicolette. You have a sense of closeness and detail of this land that could be made like no other in stanza #1, like togetherness in correlation. Poetically, "where vines ripple" naturally sounds like the breezy comfort of back-and-forth words on a hot summer day so to speak. I know a relaxation in unbearable temperatures, to be shaded in the soft shaking of green. Yet, sooner or later, there has to be more than just a sight of memory with the bush, but active.
So much to go through in 5-7 that it took me graciously a while to smell the beauty in the flow, like lyrics of flexible branches on a tree. I'm sure it inspires some too with given ideas lol!
Wow, takes breath, I can never guess what new unique thing you will be comparing... but it is totally pleasing looking over how you come down in moisture, at dark, preserving the purfumey fantasy of a dear one's voice. I don't think it could be more wonderful even with the same breath otherwise.
Congratulations on a gold I couldn't imagine anything else from, and I was wondering if you wanted to check out a contest of mine,
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2406057
to see if a piece by Nicoletta Ceccoli could spark something out of you the way your writing does to me.
PIA-K -
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Thank you, PIA-K - what a lovely indepth comment - much appreciated! I'll have a look at your contest. I see there's a "Nicoletta" there (that's how the Italians say my name, lol).
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As always white and nice... mmmmmm the richness of the scent and the richness of your words... Congratulations for well deserver gold.
~Sonja~
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I wish I had a bit of your special ink just for a day...
Every poem I read on your page is like the first poem ever, leaves me with dreaming eyes.
I like reading you little by little, just to savour the words.
Ongelooflijk mooi!
Mari
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What a nice thing to say, Mari. Baie dankie - jou kommentaar is altyd so ongelooflik mooi ook!
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This is beautiful -- very well done. Well deserved gold.
outside in the night
long, leafy tongues sing
in your mouth, and in my body
I hear you
This is perfection. Your words overwhelm me.
Garrison
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Thank you, Garrison for the kind comment. I did work on this one a bit - lolol i think i wrote about 200 versions before i posted it.
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your voice- your voice
and I listen
then,
imagine
mal
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beautiful
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Gorgeous poem Nicolette...as always...we can count on you for the most subtle but profound sense of beauty mixed with the ache of all aches.
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So smooth, soft and sensual... You are a wonderful poet. Bravo!
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Beautiful my vriendin. Beautiful! ~sigh!
~Lyrical
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wow, that is breath taking!
Tamara
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Hi Tamara! Thank you..
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...Sighhh
What more could I say?
~ Nicky♥
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I am finding your poetry to be quite a gift to my thirsty mind... I will be reading much more!!! Gasp! Sigh! Ah! Oh My!
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...wow, you've made my day
thank you so much!
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so very nice, there are falls that have the feeling of a slow glide on the wind... such beauty in these verses...PK
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I could fall in love with just your poetry and be happy forever. It is so beautiful and still that is not enough to describe it.
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There should be some type of medication available for anyone reading several of your pieces one after another . This is an amazing submission for the prompts, this is amazing poetry. I must admit, it fits my image/feel/skin/breath of poetic perfection. Geo
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lolol about the medication, Geo..now you have me thinking..hmmmm! Thank you so much
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sigh.
'heartlong'..I love this word.
this is so beautiful, I love what you did with my prompts...thank you so much for entering my contest I cannot end this poem without a sigh...I love it..such gentle & yes...sensual voices I hear in this poem
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i loved your prompts; three of my favourite things too.... thanks Tara
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heartfelt penning...you write love so exquisitely
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Breathtaking
Love is the overflowing well of creativity where our expressions are imbued with blissful exhuberance like nothing else.
This is so breathtakingly beautiful to read and an aromatic feast for the senses. I remember so vividly walking in the night and catching a waft of Jasmine and feeling intoxicated with it. What a wonderful metaphor for your beloved. And yes vocal inflections do have that effect.
Much respect poet!
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A voice can do that, can't it? When we're apart from the one we love it's like a warm blanket thrown around our shoulders. Something good to wrap ourselves in, and remember.
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yes, a voice can... and i know you've thrown his voice around you often these last few months, Becky...
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It is so generous of you to share your love with us, via such beautiful words and scenes. You have a way of capturing my heart each time I read one of your works.
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love just writes itself... thanks RedA
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"heartlong into the jasmine
of your voice"
Sighhh...You do realize, I hope, that this remarkable penning is gonna make everyone fall in love with your words. Yes, the voice can weave its incredible magic around our hearts with its majesty & grace. Absolutely stunning work, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest, my dear Friend.
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you are so right, about the voice i mean.
thank you, Vlindertjie
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Oh My Gawsh! This is be-you-tea-full, woman! So very lovely! Goldy, goldy locks This is so lovely, and sexy too. You have a very sexy voice. I can feel it in every poem of yours!
So beautiful, just like you, Nic!
- namita
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... just wait till you here me speak, lolol
or no..till you hear guy speak!
Thank you, lovely one
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well yes of course it's a gift from god and for you.. and it's beautiful...
what else is there to say, apart from how this lifted my spirits and set me free to fly this afternoon
i love this and love you two, too
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aaawh.. thank you, gilly
he does have the sexiest voice
love you too
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