Misty, fog ridden, scented waves,
Radiate from the Goddess' grave,
We approach aware and fearful,
The aurora is almost tearful,
This promiscuous She-Demon, lies;
Dead as she is she's still spry,
For a Vampire-esque sex figure,
She leads us down alure,
Guiding - ever so erotic, inviting,
Our faces enlighten, she's so igniting,
Through the pass-way we travelled,
As we wait the story's unravelled;
She is no longer as sexy, she's demonically shark,
The lights go out - there's nothing but dark,
We are alone and most probably dead!
A contest entry
- Prompts! Pic and quote!!! by Angelflower.
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Prompt 1: Picture (artist unknown)
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A good dark Gothic tale. Don't be fooled by looks same as don't judge a book by its cover! Thanks for entering.
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amazing! absolutely addicting, enthralling, whatever other 3 sylable word you want to use to describe it, its wonderful incredible seriously i love this! totally what i was looking for, but then maybe i'm biased towards dark poems. i warned you all lmao
i really love this
We approach aware and fearful,
The aurora is almost tearful,
and also i love this part
She is no longer as sexy, she's demonically shark,
The lights go out - there's nothing but dark,
We are alone and most probably dead!
its simplistic and yet just completely mind blowing! well anyway i'll stop babbling now but thank you so much for entering, this is one of the best i've seen!
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This was really good..
the imagery was really vivid,
and it had a darkly sensual flow to it.
Though I must say that the flow in your
words did seem a little forced in some places..
I still really liked it!!!
best of luck..
Angel
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Ohh.. very enticing and sexy with a little bit of dark thrown in too... love this!!
Strong ending too!!
(I gather it's for the pic and not the quote?)
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thanks, im a virgin...LOL!
it's my first...
i was trying something new, writing sexually, its different from all my angry stuff so, yeah and i think it worked well, thabks again Jacks - Domz
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And this is another wonderful work, but I still don't find the way how did I inspire you for anything. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow
Amazingly sexy take on the picture prompt. I think this poem will be winning something lol I was captivated from start to finish. Although the beat was off in places, was a great read.
Good luck in the contest.
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This was an amazing take on the picture babe...
good luck in the contest...xxx
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Cheers doll!
sorry it took long to reply havent been on and shit, but yep!
thanks for the love Li'
love you doll, domz
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