evening's pigment
rescues sweet irises
from sunglare
on this novel romance
to speak in terms
of indecent
would proclaim seas hideous
forests offensive
meadows evil
as though banning final pages
could render it unwritten
those voracious two
journal each other by waning flame
bound
to burn blue
A contest entry
- the same direction... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended May 22, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congratulations! Truly, a work of art.
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Thank you, Rowan.
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I love the pace and the structure ..quite intimate in terms of reavealing a love story ...my thanks for sharing it...
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Thank you so much for your comments and for awarding me the Gold. It was a pleasure entering your contest.
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Wow nice and thanks for the info
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Thank you, Star. I appreciate the read and the applause.
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A very subtle and beautiful write! It has been awhile since I have read one of your poems, and it was a real pleasure!
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Thank you, Fader! Good to hear from you. Hope all is well.
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Very Good
You have taken a unique look at love and the human spirit and have woven a beautifully graceful poem that has a lesson built into the superb imagery. The poem flows like romantic ocean waves that gently wash over the reader's heart and it feels good. Your emotions and poetic energy wrap themselves around your words and we are left in awe and wanting more..
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Emile, thank you for the comments and applause. You are very kind.
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good piece
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Thank you for the claps.
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