Vehement denials accompany deceit
as blood drips from words promised
via kaleidoscopic eloquence:
your words float along rainbows
painted with jagged glass -
each colour crimson based,
squirming with dry rot and lies.
You whisper a foul language,
shrouded in pots of gold
while meanings tread heavily;
combat boots never were my style.
Dimensions of mishaps caused
by slipping of forked tongues,
you use smirks of inhumanity
to cleanse your soul of afterbirth ...
Author notes
15 to 25 lines free verse
incorperate both words in your poem, blood and rainbows
lies ALWAYS bring forth hate
A contest entry
- promt/ rainbows and blood by tainfinite.
800 points, ended May 24, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"your words float along rainbows
painted with jagged glass -
each colour crimson based,
squirming with dry rot and lies."
you fully deserved your Gold for this stanza alone!
Very well done My pet!
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Yowzas! I think my ass is fire!! This is deeply dark, and soul wrenching! Oh, I can just FEEL this! Awesome!!
AmBeR
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Woah!! I can feel the emotions coming from this page! Wow! One of my favorites of yours! Congrats on the gold!
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Such a strong powerful take on the prompts
This really stood out to me--
You whisper a foul language,
shrouded in pots of gold
while meanings tread heavily;
combat boots never were my style.
Dimensions of mishaps caused
by slipping of forked tongues,
Such a darkness in this but so very well written
and yes lies do bring forth hate..so true
Thank you and good luck
Cindy
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"to cleanse your soul of afterbirth ..."
A powerful ending.
Well writ!!
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