I feel a tear in my eye
he so wants to get out
I shut my eyelids tightly
then he lets out a shout
He calls all of his brothers
and they call all their friends
I swear I'm starting to think
this madness will never end
As they try to sneak out
I feel this lump inside my throat
these tears they are so stubborn
as a headbutting old billy goat
Next thing I know they're running
from my eyes down to my cheeks
if only my broken heart, didn't hurt
my eyes wouldn't have sprung a leak!
Author notes
" Let It Rock " TexasMomma
A contest entry
- 3 years on AP ! by Anu-Nataraj.
500 points, ended January 14, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is cute and sad at the same time -- good writing.
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WOW!!!
my fav lines :
"He calls all of his brothers
and they call all their friends
I swear I'm starting to think
this madness will never end"
"Next thing I know they're running
from my eyes down to my cheeks
if only my broken heart, didn't hurt
my eyes wouldn't have sprung a leak!"
tha was so ama'ing !
u have spoken my ehart out as well...oit exactly how i feel !! beuatiful write....
good luck and thank u for fllwin the rules
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i really dont know what to say to this one... tis funny but sad at the same time... actually i think thats what makes it such a great piece... that you've managed to capture two emotions that are exactly opposite and combine them perfectly in one poem,
love and hugs,
georgie,
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incredible
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well, it wasnt what i was expecting. i liked your personification and the humor at the end.. thanks for entering and good luck.
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This one made me cry hahaha thanks for your entry lol
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This is good
What a great muse on tears I liked this one very much -
beautiful visuals although sad in content...excellent poem, really delighted in reading this one...blessings always~ Trisha
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How else would you let the pain out? smile. Nice write my lady.
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Those tears have a reason.
A broken heart does hurt sooo bad. But when your heart is broken God always washes our eyes so we can see more clearly. Your poem was very enjoyable. Thanks for posting, and may you be blessed.
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awww honey I feel this way too sometimes
it was a great poem
keep up the good work honey -
A most brilliant write of heartache but with a touch of humor as you attempt to hide behind a smile at all other times.
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This is exactly how I feel sometimes! Wonderfully descriptive and nice rhyming!!! Best of luck in the contest!!!
Az
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you described in great detail what holding back the tears and the pain that comes with it can do it unleashes the damnit can make you feel better or it can make you feel worse either way better out than in great write
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Awww! So sad but I believe crying is a necessary evil!!! And the only way I know to clear a lump from your throat!!! Well done!
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Very precious
Tears often have to fall to start the healing of broken hearts and sould...mac
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This is good
So true indeed and a heartfelt piece .Did you add this to the Texan Writers group ?
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nice poem -best of luck in the contest
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Excellent
The message and the personal touch gives your reader a great opportunity to live the life of the tear. Such emotion in this image filled poem. Great job! Don
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a sweet mix here Ellan .. that tear personified ..
I'm glad it flowed .. although I know it didn't want to .. but I hope it felt a little warm healing .. that dear little tear..
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very cleverly written .. loved it!
Lib x x
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This is a very unique write in that you have expressed your pain so well, and have also added a touch of humor within it. I enjoyed this poem. Good luck in the contest. Blessings, Patty
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well
A combination od sadness and humor I think. Perhaps the best way to deal with the pain of a breakup. Very interesting write my dear
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