if you feel
that you still
have to leave today
if you feel
the need to steal
then steal my heart away
but if you feel
lets make a deal
and ill give my heart away
I won't take you for granted
skinned your elbows on the pavement
151 in the moonlight
come here darlin' we'll stay up all night
if you feel
my heart is real
it's all yours, don't want it back
leave here frail
but unafraid
you won't break so easily
but if you fail
you have my heart
and I can't refuse
I won't take you for granted
skinned your elbows on the pavement
151 in the moonlight
come here darlin' we'll stay up all night
if you feel
if you feel
if you feel the need
if you feel
if you feel
if you feel the need to leave
Author notes
yes. these are lyrics. www.bandmix.com/eojrepus to hear the recorded version.
A contest entry
- Is It Lust, Love, Or Complete Infatuation ? PW allowed :] by innocence jaded.xx.
420 points, ended June 30, 2008, 34 entries
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still love it
im workin on my myleewink and this was next in the list! lol a two fer one special!
mylee -
-listens and reads lyrics at the same time-
i so wish a guy would write this for me. This is so beautiful!! By far my favorite thing you've ever written/posted.
Warmest,
Mylee -
It's interesting how it seems it should be sad, yet it doesn't seem you feel that sad. I appreciate that. Most poems that start the way your do, (which was cool by the way) end up being suicidal/depressing/angry. SO i like the way it turned out. Nice job.
~shiningstars
good luck
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This is a pretty cool song. I like the repetitive question within the words. It was kind of sad yet sweet too. Thanks for entering and good luck
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This is amazing and absolutely astonishing. It was so powerful and you did very well with the rhyming and, well, with everything in this piece. I think my favorite stanza was:
"if you feel
the need to steal
then steal my heart away"
Incredible lines :] Thanks for entering & best of luck <3
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