If Willingly
By: Rainbow Bi Trinity
If willingly
You would let me
Spell
Your name
Trembling
Across your ear,
I think you would
Be impressed and
Give me a call.
I have a bucket of
Fantasies,
Just the two
Me
And
You
As you watch the
Ice melt,
You felt my hand
Join with yours
Then together in
Romance petals
Our hearts melt
Author notes
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- If..... by theredcatjazzoflove.
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Comments
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very nice oem here trin i think you dud a very great job and it happen to actually be good decent writing nice job
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Fantastic
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So romantic. The bucket of fantasies and letting them melt. Romance petals, our hearts melt. All colorful phrases. I have to read some more of your work.
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I really like this. it really shows your sensitive side. Keep on writing. Best of luck in the contest.
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thanks mo mo fa tha luv boy!
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Wow,
An amazing piece inscribed beautifully.
Such passion, and it flows off the tongue while reading.
Thanks for sharing your talented soul here. Be blessed!
-Timothy
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its beautiful
i liked this baby you really made me feel all sensitive you should really start back writing
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you wrecken huh i see you trying to warm back up huh with ya writing i am going to hit this party so good luck
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Very Nice
When we going out? That was really appealing Boston. I'd go out with you.
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Works for me.
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I'm not usually a fan on centre aligned (no idea why, just one of those things) but this is good. The layout added to it, which is rare, but great when it happens. Some of the phrasing here seems a bit off, like the words have been twisted around and I wasn't fond of the rhyme
"Just the two
Me
And
You" because it sounded too twee, I guess. This poem warmed my heart, though. Good work. x x
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