I simply need love
is that such an effort
surrounded by ignorant control
can sarcasam live with giving
why do you men think you are so great
and have all this time to berate
I won't be the pin cushion doll
while you fill my body with male venom
screams in my face - you make yourself sick
No harmonious female balance to soothe me
they pummel me with judgement and instant curses
It's never been a family, I clung only to the women
Now they are gone and I left to fend for me in disease
negative fire burns in my throat and ears
these men would leave me for dead in my fear
They feel no guilt, or doubt, pomp in the air
their views grafted from years of distance
years of my own openness turned against me
She is weak, she is frail, she is not male
the black sheep, always in deep, all heart
but this, no this, we want no part
They are male, breeding contempt to heap upon my bed
my bed has no place to land, left in their hands
Who is this God that shuts the sun upon woman
I plead with he to lay soft petals on my forehead
to remind me of my own femininity
before everything I was cannot be restored
Remove the hatchet from their forearms
make their glances and hearts of stone break
Let thier frowns turn upon their own brow
This is what I ask of you now and in the asking
remind me that you God are more than man
you are the path of tender time where love began
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Susan, you've left me please come home.
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My dearest. This brought tears to my eyes. This is the very reason that when I pray I say, "Our Father AND Mother who art in Heaven" God is not a male. God is neither male or female, but both if one must assign these roles. We have lost touch with the DIVINE MOTHER, our MOTHER GODDESS. It is as though, the feminine is so feared, that it has been stomped upon and controled. Yet, IT IS THE VERY THING THAT IS FEARED THAT HUMANITY NEEDS AND LONGS FOR.
This poem is powerful, yet I hope for more redeeming and insightful problem solving here with this spiritual delemma and not just a sense of defeat. There is wonderful depth and vision reflected here. That is the first step. Bravo, wonderful poet. Are you okay? I am concerned about you. Have been on a leave-of-absence myself, but think of you often and wonder how you are. -
Hoodwink!
Dear Susan, you have penned the anguished contents of your heart so powerfully and poignantly here. The prayer to God in the final 3 stanzas is straight from your pierced soul. The final line is gorgeous. God is still that, he'll reveal that tender path of time to you.
You are gifted and you are gift. Remember that.
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Hoodwink!!
Oh My this is one Powerful piece Precious and Strong Voice to be heard
Bravo for not allowing Your Spirit to wilt
Keep that quill dancing Beautiful~
Also You have been Hoodwinked by The Poetic Bandits
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Forgot these!
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Hoodwink!!!
This is a powerful poem, and it well written, and I can relate to everything you say. A great write!
Love & Light
Debbera
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Hood-wink!
I see some rhyme in here (not overdone, like so many actually accomplish). This is deep, powerful, and has very strong imagery. As for the length, it isn't too long, or too short, and it sends a powerful message to me, as well as it's very thought provoking.
Keep up the good writing.
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Wow, this is really deep. It is one of those age old problems, the differneces between male and female and getting along with the opposite sex. I am still trying to figure that out. -
Hood-Wink
This is what I ask of you now and in the asking
remind me that you God are more than man
you are the path of tender time where love began
Almost a prayer
Rick
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Hood-wink!!
Wow... a powerful and emotional write with powerful images that linger upon the heart. A powerful write, to be sure.
Best wishes, Zach
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Hood-Wink
Strong and Powerful opening statement, I can relate to most of this write until God came across, only cause I've never pictured God as a man... and the blame I place is on myself, I have lived in these words so sad to say... The write reads with intense, full of emotions striking imagery, I am glad to have stopped by here and will be reading more of your writes... \\
P.S. You've been Hood-Winked by the Poetic Bandits
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