I cannot live life
in anticipation
or squander it
on dormant passion
splinters of time
continue
and my heart is
poured out
word for word
until every page
is filled
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nicely penned . . liked "or squander it on dormant passion" and "until every page is filled" . .
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Love this...
First off, I've got to say 'Fantastic Title' it seems to add an air of mystery & intrigue to the piece that compells you to read on.
The piece itself:
Wow, so much said in so few words...
Excellant flow, rhythm & narrative...
Had me captivated throughout...
Well done!!!
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The first stanza.
Each one of faces this at one time or another.
But words don't fill the void as we pour our heart.
For real solace only becoming one with God is the answer.
Any way my views
excellent write on the topic.
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I really appreciate all the comments I received and am thankful. I sometimes just like to express my feelings of the moment. Thanks again......joanjett4
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These sentiments have been resting heavyly on mind recently. The good thing about them is that they inspire some of my best poetry. The bad thing is that the pages are filled but my heart is empty. If only...
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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And sometimes there doesn't seem to be enough pages...
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This spoke to me of living life to the fullest! Leaving no empty space. Wonderfully thought provoking! Its great to see your muse so inspired! And you putting pen to page!
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The sheer honesty of deep thoughts, ideas and emotions that you have presented here are so universal that we can all relate to them on our own personal levels, regardless of age. You have written them in such a way as to breathe new life into them. Nicely done. Best of luck to ya in the contest!
~Midnight Lace
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This is a most interesting write. I found this to be reflective, introspective and at times even questioning. The poem itself is awesome. The words and phrases flowing are all very well written… one after another, perfectionism of lines follow. I enjoyed this immensely. Good luck in the contest.
JLG
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splinters of time
continue
and my heart is
poured out
word for word
until every page
is filled
I am especially drawn to that last stanza. I see deep contemplation of life here. Where it is, where it was, and where it's headed. I also feel a sense of not wanting to waste any time. This is great stuff. Good luck in your contest.
TxCowgirl
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i love this back ground i like the fact that it says poetry i will tune back in when your piece is ready i liked this
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