The keleidascope named Us
reflected beauty within its walls
pure, unimaginable colors bounced and played
but the pieces have spilled out
empty mirrors remain
echoing the barren misery
left behind
Author notes
prompt- "You used to captivate me by your resonating light, but now I'm bound by the life you left behind. Your face it haunts my once pleasant dreams. Your voice chased away all the sanity in me." - My Immortal by Evanescence
A contest entry
- 10/20/20 Quickie.. why not, everyone else is lol by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 20, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites short by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended December 10, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a very visual write, nicely done.
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Great way to take that line and turn it into something so beautiful. I am adding you to my favorites. I am a very picky reader. I like great poetry only and that is why I only have 5 favorites. There are not many poets that make my favorites, but you just did. Thank you.
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This is my favorite i think! Absolutley perfect! Leaves me speachless...
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Wonderfully beautifull and tinged with sadness. very well done!
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Great imagery that paints a picture that goes so well with the prompt given... echoes the same feeling in a creative way!
Thanks
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Love the color spills ... vivid imagery!
Great job with this!
Steve
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OMG! I know I always say this...But this is my fav and you are so talented...OH, I love every word of this! So beautiful and sad at the same time...I especially like "keleidascope named Us" "reflected beauty within its walls, pure, unimaginable colors bounced and played
but the pieces have spilled out
leaving empty mirrors" - Just amazing...your very original and unique...Im in love with your work.
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Beautifully penned. I like the movement, emotion and color in this writ. An enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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