Time unravels with each word
u.n.s.p.o.k.e.n. in my mind;;
in answer to your ((butwhyisitfallingapartnow))
question,
i traced the answer in the
w/r/i/t/i/n/g on my wrists;;
they say "every kiss begins with kill"
and
corruption "now on TV and video"
Do you know the key to happiness? hint—it comes with a black box warning.
Nothing's perfect is it sweetie? 'Cause I'll bet my fucked-up life that beneath your glowing skin {{foundation}} I'll find heroin tracks and scars from where the toxicity inside you b.l.e.e.d.s out to try to face the world
{{beyond your veins}}
and that sometimes your iron.beauty.resolve ~slips~ and the calories go ~down~ your throat
and acid.burns bring them back
^
up
but it.just.can’t face//this//world [no.one.can];; you’ll never make it outside of this here bubble, honey;;
does.it.hurt
to know that this li[f]e’s as decayed as the trash piled in the streets?
Sweetie [fuck.life.and.everything.in.it]
take your happy pills and ((shutthefuckupnoonecares))
nothing’s like you thought it was
and//best//of//all:
{{you never saw this coming}}
Author notes
Society... I don't know... kinda the idea of waking up to the realization that society's fucked up and nothing is really like it seems like it rightfully *should* be. Beneath the surface, there's always something corrupted and decaying lying in wait for you to realize that... it sucks.
In a list
- A Dirty Pretty Group group list • next in list
A contest entry
- dIrTy PrEtTy by poetrytoopeneyes.
600 points, ended June 15, 2008, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
um, thoughts?
Comments
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"i traced the answer in the
w/r/i/t/i/n/g on my wrists;;"
this part and the end
were my favorite parts.
so much expression. awesome write. -
Wow, great great message. I loved the way you expressed this. I totally agree. I love your use of dirty pretty.
Good write.
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wow
i dont think i've ever read any of your pieces but doll this was amazing. you've got some key topics written down and they shine!
i traced the answer in the
w/r/i/t/i/n/g on my wrists;;
they say "every kiss begins with kill"
I love those lines. This was pure genius. good luck in the contest. :]
♥
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idk...i couldnt read half of it because of the color...and the punctuation was freakishly extreme...like to the point of just blah...i'm add as is...so i think if chillaxe on the punctuation the readers may actually enjoy your poem for what its worth
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