Just when I stopped asking
When the quiet became my friend
My lot in life accepted
My peace with it much penned
Just when I stopped fighting
When I let the chaos leave
My heart quit its pretending
And allowed itself to grieve
And just when I was spent
When true solace came from me
The epiphany of content
Allowed me to feel free
And while my path awaited me
Who knew that it called to you?
While I prepared to walk alone
You came to walk with me too.
Author notes
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A contest entry
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Comments
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Oh but this is a lovely piece and well penned to. Thank you for sharing!
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I think this is wonderful. Thank you.
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wow!
this speaks volumes! it was short and simple, but very true indeed! you've written this very well, and the emotions you've instilled in me is awesome! loved it, keep penning!
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I really enjoyed this poem because it reminded me about a philosophy I try to live by, that sometimes you can survive by being strong and fixed like a rock and other times you need to flow like water around the rocks in your life to get where you need to.The rhyming was great and so was the last few lines - great finish!
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boy this was great!!!
you know sometimes i think God gives us just enough rope to hang ourselves, then pulls us back, with the same damn rope. understand? i mean, i don't! I DON'T UNDERSTAND!!! so PLEASE! explain it to me!!! this was a very good write. pens to the poet. good write. love gypsyfish
p.s. God is the shit! never doubt it...
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yes this is true and this is what the message of this wonderful life as well..well done..I love this piece..thanks...
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Sweet!
How true... Love finds you when you stop looking for it... I could realate to a lot of what you said here... I think we have all been there at one stage or another. Lovely poem, good flow and rhyme. Best of luck in the contest.
. Rewarded 4
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Very, very touching and passionate sonnet, I can feel the emotions throughout each line, I will say I wasn't ever the best at english or at least trying to fit the right words to make up a sentence and now I'm able to write poems with clarity only because I kept away from people who clouded my mind...if only everyone was able to find that special someone ah maybe one day. magnificent poem, thank you once again for sharing
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How Lovely!
What a soft gentle piece of poetry! The message appeals to my heart but the use of imaginative words like "when the quiet became my friend" and "the epiphany of content" appeals to my mind. I also enjoyed the fact that it could be interpreted a number of different ways. Could it be about love or a friendship or perhaps one's relationship with their deity of choice?
. Rewarded 8
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nice rhyhme...no choppy spots at all. and how true is this...you quit looking for love and love finds you.
well done
. Rewarded 4
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Very good
This is a beautiful story, laid out well and described with feelings born within the heart. The poem flows with a lonely beat and the words say everything by evoking thoughts within the reader's consciousness. A heart warming story that carries a message of hope and love.
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