Diverse skin colors
Different hair colors
Dissimilar eye colors
Similar hearts pulsate red
Within a same parallel flow
Without prejudice
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended May 20, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this piece. It's something I thought about today in fact after I met people yesterday that were different from me, in appearance and in opinion. But we all have some qualities that are similar and even if we are different in some ways, the important thing is finding common ground. Well done.
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Thank you! You are so right we all have something in common.
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Thank you!
Your comment gives me hope that one day people will come together as human beings.
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Thank you! Melissa
I appreciate your critique and will do just that. Thank you again and Brightest Blessings! -
Because its a short piece the repeition of 'colors' really takes away from the piece.
I would love to see this just slightly revised, its got a great base. -
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Thank you! Melissa
I appreciate your critique and will do just that. Thank you again and Brightest Blessings!
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