Stairways remain cloaked
with mirrors as reflections
bounced in symphonies
which scattered silence on
parodies
disinterring corpses
that mimicked
yourself.
Author notes
Count: 20 words
Disinter: To dig up or remove from a grave or tomb; exhume.
If you know what it means, wooohooo, let's celebrate. I didn't. Kevin saved me from my mediocreness.
A contest entry
- 20 words by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended May 20, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark, Personal, Your Past, Super Quickie, PW by DancingQueenAngi.
475 points, ended June 11, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
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It seems like it should be mimicking you instead of "yourself", but I'm not thinking about it grammatically so I could be wrong. Lovely write! Short and concise, but still awesome!
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yah that definitely packed alot of punch...raw and alot of emotion...great write!
-Lu
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Thanks!
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Yay!!
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I know you only have it in there twice but it seems like you've over used "that". I don't know how it's possible though
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Nevertheless, it's amazing.
Still waiting on the book
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lol, I added the 'that' in the end and had to sleep so I rushed I changed the first 'that' to 'which' though
Gracias
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excellent!
Ooooooo........you really express a lot of emotion with these 20 words. I love the last stanza.
Good luck in the contest!
Ethereal One
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you are such a smart individual
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Thank you
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