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[ A Moment In Time ]

Thoughts racing

Hearts breaking

Eyes closing

Hands grabbing

Hope crashing

Spoken words

Coming out

Like speeding bullets

Headed for nowhere

Author notes

20 words - IMPACT
hope I made that happen for you

A contest entry

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  • Kept As A Shadow
    July 14, 2008
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    ooo beautiful!!! Yet sad
    good luck azweel my friend


    I'm back also !!! (I was in Atlanta)


  • paperbackwriter
    June 5, 2008
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    I M P A C T you did it!!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    Because it is a shorter piece I believe all the gerunds take away from the meaning.

    Otherwise nicely done.


  • paperbackwriter
    May 20, 2008
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    cool ya it did make an impact


  • Fantasy.Dreamer
    May 20, 2008

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    AWWWW!!!!

    I LOVE IT!!!!!!!

    Especially the last two lines...jeje

    Good Luck in the contest!
    ♥♥♥♥

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