Removed from caste unjustly censured
surrounded those of pious calling.
Clement Lady of wisdom tempered
her mercy keeps the meek from falling.
Gave away her worldly possessions
gently raised of royal origin.
In search of higher consolations
sought solace among softly spoken.
Fasting, prayer, her penance seeking,
how she suffered through tribulation.
Slanders from men fail understanding
from her Veiling there rose a nation.
Far and wide they sought her for healing
martyred a widow for Believing.
Author notes
For The Library-*vote*
Background and tag: Free for use by all AP members.
Marshalline Sonnet-a form created by Mairi Bheag.
The "nine-to-a-line" sonnet, that ends each line on an unstressed syllable, rather than a stressed syllable. Its' pattern is a falling pattern,"iamb-iamb-iamb-amphibrach" It does everything the English styled sonnets do, but it also allows the poet the opportunity to end with present and past participles.
Details can be found here:
http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2265620
*Special thanks to Mairi Bheag and Maa, for tutoring me on this form, and helping me with this very special project inspired by my mom. I hope I did this form some justice. Coincidentally, my mom's first name is Waltraud, a variation of "Waltrude", and my grandmother's birthday falls on April 9th, the Festival of St. Vaudru.*
More about St. Vaudru, of Mons, Belgium:
Also called Vautrude, Waltrude, Waudru(name means 'widow')
She was daughter to the princess St. Bertille, elder sister to St. Aldegondes, and wife to Madelgaire, count of Hainault, and one of the principal lords of King Dagobert's court. After bearing him two sons and two daughters, and raising them, she and her husband retired from the community, gave away all their possessions, and lived separately. While he embraced the monastic state, she lived humbly after receiving the veil at the hands of St. Aubert, bishop of Cambray, in 656, and lived in a little cell, adjoining to which was a chapel in a solitary place called Castriloc, or Castleplace, now Mons. Many other ladies resorting to her, she formed a religious community, which is at present a rich royal chapter of canonesses. From her reputation and from this community arose the city of Mons, now the capital of Hainault. She suffered much from the slanders of men, but was known to be a miraculous healer, before she was martyred. She died April 9th, 688. She, her children and her husband, all later were canonized as saints.
Sources:
http://saints.sqpn.com/stw38001.htm
http://www.catholicnewsagency.com/saint.php?n=431
http://www.artoftheprint.com/artistpages/beck_leonhard_saint_waudru.htm
http://www.ewtn.com/library/MARY/WALTRUDE.htm
*The picture and background are of my own making, along with the poem.*
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A contest entry
- Calling All Sonnetters! Sonnets, sonnets and more sonnets! by PerVirtuous.
1000 points, ended June 10, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this! The wonderful thing about it is you can use feminine rhymes and you did it beautifully. I wrote one of these but I guess it sucked. All Mairi said was she wouldn't comment on it. Great comment huh?
I truly hope this does well in the contest.
Love,
Amera♥
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Fasting, prayer, her penance seeking,
how she suffered through tribulation.
Slanders from men fail understanding
from her Veiling there rose a nation.
Far and wide they sought her for healing
martyred a widow for Believing. wonderful thank you for sharing your poem with the group and good luck in the contest
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Wow...this was stunningly written! It was so beautiful, it pulled me in and didn't let me go! I love the background too, you are super talented! I was never much for sonnets, but I think you may have just changed my mind!
Brava!
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Such depth of feeling in this. I love history and loved your authors notes. A great tribute to your mother, too.
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Stunning work here my Sister. So sorry for the late reply here as I have been so busy writing. I have read this now though, and found it breathtaking. It really is very very beauitful.
I don't know much about 'form' writing but I do appreciate those that really know how to write 'form' and know what they are talking about.
You obviously know what you are talking about. Good luck in the competition my Sister, not that you will need it.
With
Dark
Love
Your Brother
Wayne Leon
xx
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wonderful !
I haven't even had the time to wake up yet, and you have already written the whole sonnet all by yourself !
so, as for my tutoring, I haven't even lifted a finger ... the talented lady did it all by herself ...
brava ...
even if the meter is not regular, the content of your sonnet as well as the masterful use of vocabulary make the reader surrender to its charm, forgetting the rigid rules that sometimes seem to the flow of creativity ...
I love your sonnet the way it is, but, of course will be happy to help polishing in case this is your wish ...
given the enthousiastic reaction of the host, I would say that this has been a great success for a first attempt !
much love,
marion
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It isn't perfect, and it isn't perfectly iambic, BUT it is perfectly poetic, and that is what counts. You have taken "my" form, and added something to it; by breaking the meter slightly, you have added back a natural rhythm, and by not obsessing about perfect feminine rhymes you have stumbled across the Ukrainian practice of relying on assonance, and thereby avoided a jangly sound. Very good.
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My eyes are failing me...I couldn't make out either the graphic on the side, and I had to squint to read the sonnet. Would it ruin things to make it bigger? I'm interested in the slanders of men ...
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I'll see what I can do to make the font a touch bigger. Hopefully that will help. The graphic I have no help for it, but the tag is the same graphic as the sidebar, just done differently.
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sorry to be such a nag. It is beautifully written and again I bow to your ability to write different forms. You are so talented Hetha. Look in the mirror and repeat that 100 times!
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There. Hopefully that will be a bit crisper and easier on the eyes..
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A fine example of Mairi's sonnet form. Straight to the finalists list. YAY! Not bad for a girl who fourwheels to the puckerbrush to go fishin.
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Thank you very much! I just hope she enjoys reading it too. I thought it a lovely form, and I would like to do more of them in the future. Challenging, (for me) anyways. I love challenge!
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