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Curtains Close

curtains.gif curtains image by jezalmaarzoheten 

Downcast, cast down, life’s curtains close.
Lights dim. Grim cleaners sweep away
toxic containers as last day
slips silently where no-one knows.
Final farewell may faintly spray
nostalgic tears before breath flows
so fast from cast off shadow-shows
that those still acting in the play
shake, shiver, quiver, quake, betray
self-doubts which water log, bog clay.
What bitter taste, what waste, life’s woes
owe each, as each too early knows
in turn Time’s tide sucks marrows dry,
in urn, spurned rictus, questions “why”?

 

A face, a place, run race, no trace

to tear the veil that memory

within a generation we

trash out of fashion, petty pace

is torn - born, past, life-lines unlace,

shot bolt shoot chute as history

itself, one day, may cease to be.

What tears stream from lost cause, lost case,

what subterfuges to replace

youth's mirage, mirror brain drain. See 

pain's pane, bane [p]ages tsunami,

paints vain complaints, return to base.

When coup de grâce falls frozen tears

are all we thaw from washed out years.

Author notes

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animated curtains
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Initial version

The Curtains Close

At last, too fast, the curtains close,
lights dim, and sweepers clear away
ice-cream containers as the day
slips silently where no-one knows.
Of all life's battles little shows !
What fond farewell will faintly spray
love's perfume on life's hearse to say
a last adieu before it goes.
Nostalgic tears on self's wind blows
to comfort inner fears that play
round Man's existence - short our stay !
Who guidance gives as Future's flows
engulf all in a tidal wave
where memories are hard to save ?

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  • mgmc gold member
    August 17

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    I very much liked this poem! Beautiful imagery that very clearly conveys the feelings...particularly when you know them first hand. For me, this is a great poem!


  • Rovingone gold member
    July 1, 2008

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    Incredible use of words. It flows in a way that drags the reader from one line to the next, with emotional attachment growing through out.


  • Folklor
    May 21, 2008

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    absolutely love it! this is a fantastic piece of poetry.
    very pleased to see alliteration and other poetic devices like triads and stuff. this was my favorite bit!
    'shake, shiver, quiver, quake, betray
    self-doubts which water log, bog clay' its rhythmic and powerful.
    well done


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    "What bitter taste, what waste, life’s woes
    owe each, as each too early knows
    in turn Time’s tide sucks marrows dry,
    in urn, spurned rictus, questions 'why'?"

    Sighhh...You've penned this one almost too well, dear Scribe...for I know what is required of one in order to gain this kind of insight. Still, you know I love your words, my Friend. Wanda


  • echo-ink
    May 20, 2008

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    amazing.

    i've never read anything like this. it kept me captive as i read each word and thought, wondering where the next sentence was leading me. gooooood--really liked this, i read it 2x. good luck in the contest.

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