Sometimes I want to cry
For all the times I lied
And all the ways I hide
So let the tears flow
Like a waking dream
from all my time with you
I picture memories
Like painted love scenes
Of what we used to do
Beautiful girl distracts
Making all the boys act
Ready for the attack
Watch as she goes
Sometimes I want to cry
These words I hide behind
This guitar, the lines I write
So let it out now
Trying
Flying
Finding
A Way
With you
In my mind's eye I see
A picture so serene
I know inside I'm free
To build my own belief
Sometimes I want to cry
For all our sacred lives
In awe of your design
Now I'm so grateful
There's tears of joy
and tears of sadness too
And when i get the ache
I know just what to do
When I just let out
I'm feeling such release
I'm finding inner peace
now come and join me
Trying
Finding
Flying
Away
With you.
A contest entry
- All walks of life by SilverWolf.
335 points, ended July 9, 2008, 41 entries
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we'd love to see you on an electric guitar...
some of your lines would really
heighten
their intensity with a soft squeal
that moan your pain.....
and then celebrate your final lesson learnt.
loved it!
ears/Seattle
truly fearless you are!
well done!
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thats a good idea
eventually i will have stuff up thats electrified!
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whoa totally amazing you would put gerard way to tears that how amazing the lyrics and your voice flows with the rhythm of the music ... simply amazing
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thank you that means a lot man.
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AAAAA!! THIS IS AMAZING!!! it made me smile sooo much. i'm trying to achieve making my own songs, but its not working too well. (:
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thank you! it just takes practice i think
it comes from the inner spirit.
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this a fabulous song, it's really go so much to say, i like anything aout getting away from a love that is bad for you, great job, best of luck in the contest
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ok i got it working and ITS FREAKING AWESOME! lol, nice job, ur really good at guitar. whats your name on youtube?
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the name is therealtitoman im also in a band called decent at best. we're on youtube too. check it out lemme know what u think!
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alright, i'll check you out when i get to the library, my names upperworld06 on there too
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I want to hear it now lol, i didn't know you had the song up, maybe it's not playing b/c im at school, ill try later at the library, thanks for entering though
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Hey! I love it, unfortunately it kept stopping and starting but wow! you play guitar really well. It such a sad song but i really enjoyed listening to you.
Cassie
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GRAZIE!
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hey i heard this before on other thing but it dont mean its not good sad thou i cried a little myself well not really but it made me sad relating to it thou, i miss that bitch even thou she was a bitch in the end. fuckin bitch
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GREAT SONG!!!
This was great. You play guitar well.
I love the beat and so did my sister.
We were singing along with you. lol
Great Job.
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Awe,
I think this made me frown more than smile.
But i loved it.!
Just took me that special place and then i realized i probably would never be in that special place again. *sigh*
Anyway loved the piece and good luck in the contest.
-Mandi
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oh you will be. you have the universe before you!
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Blown away
Wow, i love it! I can really relate to how you have described this emotion, the way you repeat sometimes i cry with a different reason, it's just amazing.
My Favourit part was how you ended it:
'Trying
Finding
Flying
Away
With you.'
Whoever this girl is that inspires you to write all this fantastic poem, or whoever it is. They really don't know what they're missing out on.
Love it.
<3
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This was really wonderful.The flow was really nice and the imagery here was great... You did a great job, like you always do..lol. Keep it up hun, it's been a while.. Hope to read more from you soon..
Angel
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wow
amazing i love it. its very good.
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Nice to see you kept writing while you were away. You were greatly missed Chris. [♥] welcome back. This is wonderful, && I sense another song for your band.
I love you.
Forever&&Always.
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