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Bear Facts - Unplugged


Conventional wisdom aside,
black bears don't really hibernate
all winter long ... they alternate
wakefulness and sleep ... and they bide
their time till Spring at last returns.
They seldom venture from their dens
(though it's instinct alone that pens
them for these seasonal sojourns).
Spring finds them truly mean as hell.
They eat roots and needles to plug
their intestinal tracts, so snug
there's practically no need to tell ...
the poor things suffer to the last
second, when the plug is passed.









Author notes

Since it's about Spring, and the bears are waking up and coming out of their dens, I thought I'd commemorate the event.

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  • RatherImaginative silver member
    September 24

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    A bit of humor in poetry stumbled upon unexpectedly is always a gem to my eyes. The last quatrain made me smile. One doesn't often consider how it must feel to wake from such a long sleep . . . and fast. Thanks so much for entering my contest!

  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 16
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    So knolledgable you are

    Its ever so interesting to read your workd of animals and their ways .Great write here


  • Luna Tique Fringe gold member
    May 23

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    lol...can I say TMI (too much information)..delightful and humorous. It caught me completely off-guard. You are a catbird, my friend.

  • ladame
    May 23

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    Quite an abstract topic - bears and their habits, is there a reason/are they quite important in your idea of spring?

    The monotony of the tone really reads to me like a Discovery Channel program, and it's pretty effective. I actually found the poem quite humorous - the tone mixed with the last line made me titter.

    Nice length - and a cool use of the a sonnet (with the revealing last line), and mostly a great choice of words, without a hinderance in the rhyme.

    It's great how it's so plain, but really quite intricate in its non-dramatic outlook.

    • ecrivain01 silver member
      May 23
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      It was intended to be ...

      humorous but in a rather subtle way.

      I write about many things. Unlike most on this site, I have no common theme or common style of writing, and if you read a hundred of my poems you'd still have a problem finding any common theme.

      Thanks for stopping by.

  • EternitysLastWish
    May 23

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    I love it. Very poignant, with a message that makes the heart ache.
    A lovely sonnet that is nothing short of perfect, and tells a saddening, yet very important story.

    Good luck!


  • PerVirtuous gold member
    May 20
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    L4 is only 7 syllables. This is a fine sonnet that tells a good story. Thank you for your entry.


  • She Has My Heart
    May 20
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    I love the enjambment, it makes it slip so willingly through the mind and off the tongue.

    And kudos to you for getting "intestinal tract" into a poem haha!

    Your range is just phenomenal...every poem I have read is different.

    Excellent

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