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Ring, Ring

I sit next to the phone awaiting your call...
If it rings I would have a story to tell all...
But if not my world would crumble and fall.
I really can't wait to hear your voice...
Calling or not is her very simple choice...
I can't freaking wait until it makes its noise.
Oh come on what's wrong with this thing?..
Is it broken where's the ring, ring?..
If you make the sound true love I'll win!
Maybe she's waiting for her phone to also sound?..
Or maybe at her house she's just not around?
I swear if you don't ring I'll beat you down!
Lord what could that girl be doing?..
Is it mocking me cause I might be losing?..
No it must be my ming that with me it is fooling.
But seriously now true love to me you must bring...
Let's go now make me feel like a great king...
All you have to do is give out your little ring, ring!

Waiting for that special call...

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  • Enchanting Angel
    June 2

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    Beautiful!

    I am still here and i do call you just not on the phone lol. I may not be your true love but only time will tell. I loved this very amazing poem. Again my amazing writer.

    Always
    ~Amazing Angel~


  • oikevois baby gold member
    May 26
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    RING RING RING!

    Why aren't you answeing??????

    Mylee

    • Climax gold member
      May 26
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      You're such a bomb shell girl!

      *LOL!*

      Very funny indeed!

  • going nowhere
    May 20

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    loved the line.. if it rings i would have a story to tell...
    waiting for that call, to hear that voice... waiting is sometimes SO hard to do, yet... we continue to do just that because we know in the long run, it will be SO worth it.
    a good writer can make many readers relate to what is written... you seem to do that well.

  • luv2dream gold member
    May 20

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    Wow again! another one I can relate to big time! You can't even realise. I know you say you have not lived most of your poems but it seems you just know.


    • Climax gold member
      May 20
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      One's imagination when used wisly can relate to many things..!
  • shellseasuicide
    May 20
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    this is super great
    i love how you make it seem as if the phone is playing with your mind

  • Deathless1
    May 20

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    this is so sweet.
    i have that happen ever night.lol so this speeks to me. i love the flow, and the last line was well thought out.

    great write,
    KNIGHT TIME


    • Climax gold member
      May 20
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      Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! Love yous!
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