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brown grass grows on sand
dwarf trees provide green needles
hot summer sky wins

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haiku
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  • Kelli Marie
    May 22, 2008

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    This reads like three separate statements. You haven't connected lines 1 and 2. Though a great write. Thank you for sharing.
    Kelli

    • carole21
      May 23, 2008
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      thanks

      didn't plan to connect lines 1 and 2 except as a description of the same picture . . seems more Oriental to me . .


  • nordicsky silver member
    May 20, 2008

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    This is a master class in how to write haiku. You have 5-7-5, nature and a season. I must do the class and have a go at this.

    As ever, thanks for the inspiration.
    Love, Peter