You and I see the same
And think the same
Army girl saluting to the other
But too short to enter
I speak my mind
And I speak from the heart
Just as you do
I think we'll get along
I see what you say
In so many colors
Abuse is wrong
And abortion is sick
I cant stand stupid people who do stupid things
Just so they can get a look from one person
I see what the meaning to every word is
I'm one of those who is unique in everyway
I've cut I'm been abused
I cried when my best friend commited suicide
I'm tough I'm strong but in the end
I'm the weakest one
I try to be the one that gets leaned on
Not the leaner
I see what you say in many ways
I hope you and I can get along
Author notes
Rainbow sister
A contest entry
- AP FAMILY STARTING by forever and ever.
300 points, ended June 25, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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lol is this the poem u were talking about cutie hehe I likies =) very nice
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Great job.
Lots of emotion and feeling here....I particularly like
I'm tough I'm strong but in the end
I'm the weakest one
I try to be the one that gets leaned on
Not the leaner
this says alot to me. VERY relatable. I too am the lean on and never the leaner. Infact I dont even cry. The older I get the more I realize my inability to ever take a break from being the strong one is my biggest weakness of all. I LOVED this. Great job.
(PS - but did you mean ALONG at the end? or did you mean ALONE as you said? I cant help but think you meant along and its simply a typo....even if it isnt, I might suggest changing it anyway because as mentioned by another commentor the fact that ALONG was used earlier... it gives the reader an expectation to read the same word since its so similar....Our eyes do that. Just a suggestion)
Jamie
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I love it
In this write grammer wasn't a issue. I like it. Would the meaning of the Mona Lisa be differnt if her nose was a little crooked? My point. I still feel the emotion in this poem. Look at me all Philosophical.
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Very interesting. I can really feel your theme, and your emotion. But check your grammar, I realize for some people it is just an outpouring of feelings, so you don't really care about spelling. But it really throws some people off, especially when someone spells a word right, but it is not the word they intended.
'I hope you and I can get alone.'
I don't know if that was what you where intending to say, but since you said 'along' before, I'm assuming that it is a typo. Other then that, great emotion. But never be afraid to accept help from others too.
The concept was said and clear. Thanks for sharing.
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very beautiful. welcome to the family sis.
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Thank you all
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