Part 1
Standing their all alone
His silhouette against a barren tree
His world moving in parallel motion
A tear trickling down onto his face
Glowing under the moonlit sky
Truly his heart was weeping
Lachrymose written all over his face
Praying a silent prayer
Wild thoughts running through his head
Wondering what fate would bring him now
Why oh why, does the Gods cause such anguish
“Wasn’t she meant for me? Wasn’t she the one I was praying for?”
His face lit up as her lovely face crossed his mind
He couldn’t forget the smile she gave him
All his troubles vanished in a single moment of time
As her fiery red hair blew against the northern wind
Her hair effeminating with the smell of fresh lilies
She looked like a water nymph.
Suddenly reality dawned on him and his handsome face frowned
As he thought of the events that passed through
Her face was drowning and drowning……
Part 2
As she walked in the long stretched road,
She felt that she was drowning in an abyss.
Her heart was filled with morose burdened with feelings long endured
As the dusk of the night closed in she longed for the warmth of the sunshine,
Enduring pain coupled with deception
She arched her eye-brows,
Threw her braided hair behind
Looked at the dime in her trembling hands and everything flashed before her eyes
Her mind kept spinning and spinning as he threw her out of the house
It was he who lied, his deception in their marriage.
Oh how foolish she had been not to see it thrown in front of her face
She had no place to go
Walking and walking she knew that she could never love again.
Or could she?
Conclusion:
With a slight drizzle pouring it was as if the Gods knew of their deep anguish and were shedding their tears too
Two people all alone in the world, searching for a miracle to happen
Thunder and lightning struck “were the Gods fighting?”
She took shelter under “a” barren tree. Her face facing the north
His face facing the south, the roaring ceased and both of them turned
He saw her and she gave him a heart warming smile
His anguish vanished and his handsome face illuminated like the morning star
She started to drown in his handsome face.
The world suddenly ceased to exist.
Cupid struck his bow
And she slowly walked up towards him.
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Comments
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Suddenly reality dawned on him and his handsome face frowned
As he thought of the events that passed through
Her face was drowning and drowning……
I don't understand that part completly. I love how you have the parts to the poem and you seperate it, but you could use a different word than conclusion, it just seems a little anticlimax.
I like the story, but I was a little confused at some parts.
In the first line, is it supposed to be "there"?? It doesn't make sense to have a plural number of people when there is only one under the tree. If you mean it to be "their", please explain, I would like to understand.
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