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Morning Dress

 
 

portion of the fire
moon glow by the mountainside
laid in morning dress

 

revised

moon glowed its halo
by the mountainside portion
laid in morning dress

 

Author notes

Haiku

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Kelli Marie
    May 22, 2008

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    This seems very close to three separate statements. I will of course reread. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
    Kelli
    • haley27 gold member
      May 23, 2008
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      Hi

      I revised this one have a look and tell me what u think. Haley27