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Good And Evil Within

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As I kneel in my garden

among the daffodils.

I hear a whisper from within,

"beware the weeds can kill".

 

I do not heed the warning,

there were no weeds to see.

So I continued planting tulips,

around my lilac tree.

 

Again I hear a whisper,

soft as a summer breeze.

"'Stop what you are doing,

listen to me please".

 

I realize this whispers stubborn,

it will not go away.

I decide to ignore it,

I will not let it ruin my day.

 

My garden turned out lovely,

a vision of delight.

It was time to put away my tools,

turn in for the night.

 

As the sun ascended,

for the whole world to greet.

I had awakened from my bed,

and jumped up to my feet.

 

With a need to see my garden,

I ran straight out the door.

As the words had filled my thoughts,

of the whispers I ignored.

 

"Beware the weeds can kill",

screamed loudly in  my head.

As I stood before my garden,

with half my flowers dead.

 

I will spray the garden,

and kill those deadly weeds.

"You will kill the flowers too",

were words the whisper pleads.

 

"You must pull them out one by one,

it may be tedious I know.

But they are worthy of your sacrafice,

they will blossom as they grow".

 

"The flowers are very precious,

with there beauty and grace.

We are not to lose a single one,

each holds a sacred place".

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PISCES RAINBOW

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    June 27, 2008

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    This is very beautifully written. I love the imagery. Those weeds are very pesky and pop up when you least expect. I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    GREAT WORK

    My goodness, I was captivated by this piece loving this imagery poetic dance it was my pleasure to read you today There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write

  • Judith Chandler
    June 7, 2008
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    An unusual take on this prompt.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • echo-ink
    May 30, 2008

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    Beautiful (smiling from ear to ear)

    I LOVED IT. I'VE MISSED YOU, MY LITTLE FRIEND. dah writing on caps. congrats on the honorable!!!
    The poem was amazing. where have you been?

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    May 22, 2008

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    Hello Pisces Rainbow. I do like this poem a lot. Has an Aesop's Fable taste to me. And the moral of the story; a valid one. My regards.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    Everything in due time,
    with a sensible plan in mind,
    the whispers seemed to say.
    Plan ahead, success to find!

    A great story!

    Aesthete


  • ourgirlFriday
    May 21, 2008

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    Lovely

    Often we ignore the whispers, but too late. Takes me back to my earlier days of despair in the fighting in the convent, and all the put downs; I thought myself a weed in the garden. But what is a weed, but a plant that grows where it's not wanted? I love morning glories, and ivy, and other things people consider weeds because they let them get out of hand. Planted flowers have their sacred place, and so do weeds, for not only do they differentiate the true flowers from the false, they give meaning and value to those that are preferred for their beauty or fragrance. But if a weed, even a dandelion, is in the right place, it remains no longer a weed. For dandelions and wild pansies are edible and useful for home remedies, didn't you know?


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    May 20, 2008
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    Wonderful!

    Great write! Inspiring, and lesson full! I like the picture btw best of luck dear


  • princehusayn
    May 20, 2008

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    thought provoking good write

    Take heed to the inner voice there the warnings come from take heed for life's sake lessons one must learn from Weed and flower come from earth both fashioned nourished by sun and water. The strong flowers will prevail the seeds of them come in seasons veiled in the future. I love the imagery and the symbol of flower and weed multiple parables of life in this world powerful lessons to those who reflect. The source of all things good and evil does exactly dwell within. Thank you for sharing this spiritual lesson.I enjoyed the read. Excellent write Peace... princehusayn


  • Candy6
    May 20, 2008
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    lovely

    Well written poem


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    May 20, 2008

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    auntieeeeeeeee i donno what to say except woww and wow and superb it touched deep in me like the stories which Jesus told to his disciples you've done a superb job in this one im printing this as much as i love it its worthy of heavenly Gold and i know GOd has reserved riches for you up in his kingdom for a blesssed and such a lovely auntie i have love you loadsss auntie
    and good lucks in da contest

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