the feel of your breath
awakens lost emotions
to which I fully surrender
for one brief moment
it feels as if we are one
but your warm touch
is just a decoy
from reality
Author notes
Prompt: From The Heart Came Truth
A contest entry
- Truth.. Quote Prompt.. by Angelflower.
713 points, ended May 25, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Geesh girl, I'll never get a date if you keep telling the ladies all my secrets..lol. Just teasing my dear. The truth of the matter is that the chill of an empty heart can only be erased by the warmth of a pair of loving arms. Congratulations on the HM.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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This was really amazing.. You really took the prompt and made it your own.. The emotions here were really strong and I'm sure many can relate..This was a very intense read.. you did a wonderful job..
Thank you very much for sharing this with us..
Best of luck..
Angel
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You have some very well woven words donning the page here as well as an infusion of intense expression and feelings. Write on my dear friend and keep spreading your enchanting words across the pages to warm and inspire us all just as you have done here and best of luck to ya in the contest.
~Midnight Lace
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It’s amazing how something common and perhaps even mundane to most can suddenly cause an epiphany and change a life. You've captured that very well with some very nice metaphorical moments. Excellent job! Good luck in the contest.
JLG
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but your warm touch
is just a decoy
from reality
WOW! I didn't see those closing lines coming at all. The stark contrast they give this piece creates an even more interesting read. Good luck in the contest. I like this a lot.
TxCowgirl
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Beautiful and sad at the same time! A tough feat to accomplish but you did it wonderfully! Amazing write my friend!
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