To write a poem is to pour out one's soul
And to open up like that you must pay a toll.
You must be willing to experience hurtful advice,
Have your soul torn apart--not so cheap a price.
The walls you built up to hide who you are
Come tumbling down and people come from afar
To scrutinize your self and demean your ideals
So much that your words you then try to repeal.
Yet it is much too late, and the judges have shown.
You have no control, these consequences were known.
Yet still you panic and act like you aren't hurt,
Yet, regardless, your true feelings are all too overt.
So, heavily winded, you wipe off your brow,
Yet you refuse to end this futile endeaver and, now,
Helpless and vulnerable to the eyes of all,
You pick up your dusty hammer and rebuild your wall.
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elmundopasa1
A contest entry
- Prime. Rhyme . Time (Must vote contest) by Legend.
2000 points, ended May 25, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow. This is really good. It's sometimes how I feel a lot when I write something that's about me. Like when I first joined, I was somewhat nervous to see what people would say about my writing.
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How different and beautiful this is!! Very perfectly crafted.. word-to-word.. Wonderful entry.. thanks
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...Nodding my head here, David. Like all arts, poetry takes such diligent practice. It's grows along with the poet. I don't think that hammer gets much time to become dusty actually, until you just let the wall down and sing your songs in your own voice regardless of criticism. Critique however, can be useful. You reminded me of a quote I once read: "Take what you can use, and leave the rest." ~KL
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This is a great sentiment! So many poets can relate to this, sometimes beating ourselves about the ears as we are the person who knocks ourselves down. You have covered the subject well, an interesting take on a difficult subject. ~Von
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Ahhh..this is great! Love the last line...to hammer home your point! Best to you in this contest.
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So true
When one attempts to put their thouhts on paper they do leave themselves open to the critics.Some valuable and some unjust. But write is what we try to do. So again we must try
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I think you summed that up in a nut shell!...yes many will relate to your words, I know I can for sure. Well done and good luck with this very clever entry. A very enjoyable read indeed!
Shaz xx
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nice tite it is so piercing and drawing i think you did a very great job penning this it was a pleasure to read good luck to you in the contest
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The price we have to pay is often steep until we find our authentic voice, and when the true voice rings loud and clear... people will start to pay attention! Until then, ya gotta roll with the punches, and if it isn't coming from your heart, walk away!!! Nice and very emotional sets of rhyming quatrains...
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You speak for so many poets Why do we do it?( because we can't help it) A great piece of rhyme, with good flow, and subject matter Good luck in the contest Thank you for entering
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