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Nuit et jour d'un phoenix

Ashes of your whisper
Sighing,
by light of the moon.

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The title means Night and day of a Phoenix

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  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 25, 2008
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    Excellent. It always amazes me how much can be said in so few words. Thanks for entering.


  • notorious gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    I like the phrases "Ashes of your whisper" and "by light of the moon"--"Ashes of your whisper" is a unique take on a phoenix and "by light of the moon" reminds me of the book I'm reading right now by Dean Koontz of a similar name. =] However, I think 'sighing' should be placed in the same line as the first one for more fluidness. Kudos.