I don't love you as if you were such diamonds
Or an artist's masterpiece in a gallery
I love you as certain dark things are ment to be loved
Secretly, between the soul and the scenery
I will breeze you flowers of elegance for your delight
Of bird songs at morning and star shine at night
My love for you blossoms,a flower ready
Hidden within the petals the fragrance of passion
Thanks to your love, lively in my body
I am honored to be granted your affection
I will build a palace fit for you and me
Of green days in forests and blue days at sea
I love you without knowing how, or when, or from where
I love you simply, without problems or pride
I love you in which there is no I or you
I love you in this way because I don't know any other way of loving
My heart will sing you music of love
Which moves a soul and flies a dove
So great my love for you
Your hand upon my chest is my hand
So great my love for you
When I fall asleep it is your eyes that close
I remember what you most admire
Of the endless river, of my heart's desire
Author notes
I hate edd, i hope its okay that only some parts rhyme, i hope you like it.
A contest entry
- Love me, hate me, it's all the same to me!!!! by HeartBr8ker.
400 points, ended August 22, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Sweet!!!
Yes it is ok that only some parts rhyme. That is what makes it yours. My fave part is...
My love for you blossoms, as if a flower being ready
Hidden within the petals is the fragrance of my passion
Thanks to your love, lively in my body
I am honored to be granted your affection
This is a trulely inspiring piece. Good luck
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This is great! I loved the kind of surprise ending. (I think it was supposed to be a surprise. Maybe I'mjust toally oblivious.) I really like this, either wa, and did, indeed, have fun reading it. Clever name for a dog, I like it! Nice job!
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Heartfelt and beautifully written!
Thanks a lot for taking the time
to enter this contest. Good luck
to you and keep it up!
Jeremy0826 -
nice piece..
good luck in my contest
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well well
this is great! i love the honesty of the emotions and your use of metaphor and to be honest this is a bit like some of my own work.I agree with one of the earlier comments regarding some of the line lengths and i'm not a great fan of rhyme (mainly as i can't do it myself at all) but this doesn't seem that forced and works very well with teh sentiment you so clearly express. this is one of the best poems i've read so far, thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest.
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WOW!
This poem left me breathless! Honestly, i think this is one of your best pieces! This was definitely not forced! Every line flowed like an endless river and i was left wanting to read more of this brilliant poem! 
Your lines were pretty long, but it was alright for this poem coz it just fits into this piece perfectly well! OMGOSH! Your rhyme was awesome! it didnt sound forced, that wasz wonderful, and it makes sense and most importantly it flows amazingly! It was really cool the way your "double-lined" stanzas created a whole new poem of itself! Unique!
Basically, this poem just sent chills down my spine! It was LOVELY! and plus, i guess it is a wonderful feeling to love and be loved this way! OOH! And for the tittle.. lets see, how 'bout "my love for you..." or "In love with an angel" or "How you make me feel" Oh well, these are just some ideas that popped up in mind! And, i hope you win something coz i think this deserves it!
~Ranji
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lovely and heartfelt poem...TY for entering
Lynda
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nothing really sounds forced here, but I think you can improve this poem::
I can see that a lot of heart went into this poem, I think the first stanza shares of accepting another person for who they are:: and maybe the entire poem:: prettypoetry
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