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withering calm


Time rolled like an ocean tide
messenger of distant powers
uneven moments smoothed
beneath familiar surfaces, a reality;

and I stand against a withering calm
hold of wished for winds, change
to bring things beneath our feet
to our eyes and hands

captive we
bound on knees to an age of waste
and yet we stand, risen to greater heights
for hope is a pressing ache within,
the caged spirit knows what might be
when wind and wings lift our eyes
and fire fills our skies, for change
comes in this day.



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  • Rowan gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    what would we be without hope for all things; love, peace, and happiness. So richly worded, your flow is impeccable. sigh.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Ah ...

    strong in its acknowledgement of sorrow and of blood wasted ... and in its call for perspectiv (... wind and wings lift our eyes ...).

    What MAGNIFICENT contest. You truly gifted poets with this opportunity.

    Love
    Myra


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    I am always thrilled to see a host enter his/her own contest. Your thoughts and feelings on the topic you have presented are most meaningful.

    I was in awe with your second stanza that grabbed my guts hard. I am such a novice to knowledge and have truly lived a sheltered life.

    You, your contest, and your poem are a wonderful inspiration and reminder to look beyond my fences and truly see life.

    ~Pamela


    • Peteskid gold member
      May 22, 2008

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      this struck me about the inspiration Pam, how devastating inaction can be, and here in the US where politics drags so many valuable things ...life changing things..into a mire to preserve the powers of the status quo...so anyway...thanks so much for reading and your kind words...PK


  • Cannonsfire
    May 21, 2008

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    So pleased you put one in yourself, for I know of your pride and love for this nation, it beats with mine. Love,Chez


  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    This is a very good complement to Noronha's poem.
    You captured the essence of his thoughts, added your own thoughts and feelings and the result is simply great!

    The internal rhymes worked so well with the soft rhythm.
    Excellent read h...

    v^

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