Do I have to…
Set you free, let you soul soar skies, un-pained?
Why should I loosen the grip, let go of the bond?
Time, so little time we shared.
Not ours, a lifetime of living united
So I beg unknowing, unwillingly spirits
to relinquish me of this burden,
to bathe me in peace.
Guide me to wings of warmth and stay,
together; remains given to heavens
when finally… I embrace letting go.
Author notes
A write for my mum..R.I.P.
CinfullyDelicious
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A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie(overnight)... Prompt by Angelflower.
716 points, ended May 21, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm looking for favourites!!! :) by Luckintheshadows.
625 points, ended July 11, 2008, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hello.
A very touching moving write. Although not many lines in this, I do feel that this gives the reader the scope to add more due to any experiences they may have had in terms of letting go of loved ones. Certainly you have presented the stages well; anger and questioning, regret, and peace coming from doing what deep down we know is the right thing to do, and the letting go which brings the paradox, for the good times stay within. Well that is what I read from it anyway.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest, and may you and your mother find the peace in accordance with your beliefs.
My regards.
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Oh, this is so beautiful, so very very sad. I can relate in a way, having lost my father 9 years ago this month
And I'm sorry that you lost your mom
Thank you for sharing your amazing words, and for taking the time to enter my contest,
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Aw im sorry bout your Dad..losing any parent sucks
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wow..... what great poem you have penned here..... i remember it beatingmine in that other contest but why i didnt comment i dont know.... but this is a well deserved silver so congrats as for this contest... good luck........
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A beautifully sweet silver here!! love that picture too and you brought it to life with the words. Your pen soars across the page etching beauty with every syllable. Amazing!!
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I fell for that pic the minute I saw it, though it brang sad words for me, about my mums passing etc...I did still so enjoy writing it
Cin
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Amazing poem that resonates deeply into my existence...Thanks for evoking deep emotions that seemingly forgotte
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Aw... how sad and beautiful. A truly deeply penned write you have here. I feel it. I wish you luck.
~Kystal Angel
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Thank you, I am so happy to win silver with this write, as hard as it was to write lol
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This is so beautiful. The imagery here is outstanding and I could feel the pain and heartache in everyword. You have done so well here and all the best for the contest. My thoughts are with you.
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Thaank you darl
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To easy the pain of mom that is lost
is hard ... harder than any can know
unless they too have felt that pain
You did good here and I am honor to have
read this one today.
Riftkin
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you said it
thank you
Cindy
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By letting go you are actually holding her closer in your heart. It's been 38 years for me and I still feel my Mother watching over me.
I feel every ounce of your pain my darling.
Love always
Mum
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Thanx mum...so glad I have yo
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Oh sis.. this was really touching and so sad though there is hope, and love within your words..
You really touched my heart with this piece.. and you did a wonderful job with the prompt.
I just don't know what to say, you did such a wonderful job.. and the emotion in it sis is just so heartfelt...I loved it..
Angel
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I hate having to touch peoples heart cause of my moms death but sharing the love I felt , still feel is just so important to me...that I will even share this horrible pain.
Thank you sis...the pic did instantly spark thoughts of her...why I took so long is honestly wanting it perfect lol
Cin
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oh yea, i forgot, i like the pictures to!
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good poem
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Thanxxx
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Outstanding!!!!!
Aww sis! I didn't realise it was about your mum when you showed me it...
This piece fills my sense with such a feeling I can't even describe.. it captivates me.. it causes a yearning in me to embrace letting go also... and to be honest.. it brings tears to my eyes from it's beauty!!
I'm such a sook!! But this is such a beautiful and amazing write... I'm so proud of you!!
Love you sis
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I'm sorry I thought I had, lol
hehe its okay I'm crying right now..not nessicarily sad tears..but im crying hehe
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Ahh well.. they are tears of emotion and that's always a good thing!
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