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Heart Encased In Ash

 

tears of blood

 

Dripping from a fountain
of everlasting sorrow,
My tears of rubies
are a display of how my heart trembles.
I have nothing but remorse, for now, this heart
once belonged to you, now is vacant.

Nothing in you could stop my heart
from being torn
As if your were a clot, here to stop the bleeding
of my soul
Nothing cries out louder than I have

Feelings of weakness, as sick as can be
Wanting to know
What have I done to deserve such pain?
Is this life's way of playing a game?
If so, I forfeit.

For, in my sadness
I'm dripping rubies on the carpet.

 

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[artist credit: 'tears of blood' by xmansonx at deviant art]

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  • xXDarkChildXx
    July 30, 2008

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    I love that picture!! I want to soo steal it! haha jk, I know I can't. The poem is truly gripping, and full of emotions. Trying to follow the picture, and it works so well. Luck in the contest!

    xXDCXx


  • peregrin
    July 30, 2008

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    Ok, first, I love the picture!
    Very good picture for the piece!

    I really like the actually poem, it is creative, well written, and very emotional. AKA just what I was looking for. You hit the contest on the mark!

    Good luck!


  • movedon
    July 26, 2008

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    dripping rubies on the carpet.

    Another really great write. Wonderfully penned imagery.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • RX-Queen
    June 6, 2008

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    Great write, lots of emotion. I also enjoyed the tears to rubies analogy,and I liked the second stanza the best, well done. Thanx for entering and good luck!


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Hmmm... This had its moments, though the last line was a little harsh for the rest of the piece. I loved the analogy of blood to rubies, though... Simply stunning there! Also, the dual usage of the word 'heart' one after the other in the first stanza was a bit awkward, but those first 4 lines were incredible. Well done, and good luck!

    Laura


  • Lady Australis silver member
    May 19, 2008
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    this is really amazeing hunni
    wow i love it
    well done n goodluck

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