I wait to feel him,
to see him again.
We are lost lovers,
looking for a chance.
I've never felt his kiss,
but dream of the way it would taste.
I want to hold him,
and be held by him.
It may happen, but it may not.
If it doesn't my love will go to waste.
I talk through the internet,
trying to show my love.
But at the end of the day,
I'm still waiting.
Waiting To be touched,
held, and kissed.
Waiting to be with him
and feel like I have read
in so many of my books.
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The last stanza was my favorite. It relates heavily to this theory that people cant be happy in relationships anymore because of movies and books showing them this glamorous version of love and people dont realize that it takes a lot of work.
or at least that is what I read into it.
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Very nice poem.Its very good.Very sweet.For your first time it is very....hm....awesome ^-^
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I really like that line at the end about feeling how people feel in books; I think that about sums up how waiting for first love feels. Nice job!
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well written
Wow the emotion flows from the heart to the pen and then onto the page throughout this piece. Excellent form, wonderful rhythm, and most importantly the imagery is not wasted just to fill space. "It may happen, but it may not.
If it doesn't my love will go to waste." This line has some strong meaning to it but never forget that no love is ever wasted, for if you feel it then it has served its cause well. Keep writing and never lift the pen from the page.
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men are simple. just tell him and he may surprise you! fix: "It may happen, but it may not." just do SOMETHING with it. try to describe. not: "I talk through the internet", but "sweet words ride electric currents to you in far off places". good luck and keep writing!
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Cyber love sounds so sweet and sad too. This is well written and flows nicely. Wonderful poem!
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well written, for a start
if this is your first woah you are waay better off than I was 
this is pretty good, but you can definitely improve 
loved the read though! && welcome to AP. you will love it
take care
checkmate.
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if it's really the 1st you ever wrote...
WOW> -
The White Knight
is not always as he appears to be - be wary! I like the poem...it's a good start in poetry. I think it's well done in it's own right, but the subject could be touched upon with more depth, you know what I mean? Yes, could be metaphors, but explore the intense emotionality of the subject...of waiting for a lover
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Wonderfull poem. i loved how you said that you were lost lovers looking for a chance. great job
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oh this is beautiful. great poem.
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i can only say that i love it, i feel the same way about a girl. but hey life will bring things around to you. great job, keep it up
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Welcome to Allpoetry!
aww this was so sad, I could tell you long for him, I could feel it in your words. Great job, I loved the last stanza. Keep it up!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Aww... so sad, you can feel the longing in this poem, and I bet a lot of people could relate to it. Good luck if this poem is about you! Ooooh, I especially love the ending
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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Sort of ify
You need to explore your emotions. Instead of saying I am in love, tell us how it feels to be in love, etc. You have the potential to be a great writer, so keep trying. By the way promoting is illegal in the chatterbox, so before you post in there again you might want to read the rules.
~CJ
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