Let us walk under falling bridges
Where we can be at peace
And no one in the world can harm us only us to say the least
For tomorrow dreams are foretold and wishes have been brought to life as only am I in your arms is only what I dream
For night is drawn in 3 words to be said
And for tomorrow will be light and the dark with shadow into the day
With a pencil of the boy who made me fall into this metro day
Looks around making a marshmallow castle
Castle for a prince and princess
And for a queen and king
Castle that I tear down with my words and with my tears
Shadows of close friends that have passed by with fear
Our next world I do not know
Afraid to look upon the unknown
So for now I am all alone I am all alone
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nice poem! its really emotional to me i cried when i read it but bravo! well done.
Miranda -
very nicely done. Your word usage helped pen some great imagery.
and i must say, that i think line 4 is a bit too long, that maybe you could continue it on the next line
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I love it. It is sad but happy. I cryed.
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i love it! its so awsome.
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this is sooooo beautiful..
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This is an excellent poem, and I love the pictures you painted out. They're brilliant.
I liked it a lot.
I think I can relate to this a lot as far as dreaming about perfect things goes <3
Marshmallow castles, prince and princesses ~ good description.
"Castle that I tear down with my words and with my tears"
~ beautiful words.
Awesome write.
Kudos,
dovey~
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WHOA!
nice =]
keep it up.. you're wicked talented XD
-Rayne
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wow this is amazing! amazing writing seriously!!! keep it up!
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fantastic!
I really liked that poem. its very good! -
an excellent poem. i very much am enjoying of this poem and of the poet for his word use and phrase abilities.
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awwww i wish someone would dream about me sometime...
...man but seriously this peom is good. Great Job! ah and by the way i still have you memberz
-GOREgous Gore
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this is really good
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that good i loooovvveeeeeeeee it
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i love it! your good! your better then me!
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dude this is awesome. seriously u got talent. cant wait for more to read keep it up
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Wow baby ur good! I wish I could write like you!
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