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A Tree In The City

A flame in the snow,

A pool in the fire,

A stone in the clouds,

A hotel in the grass.

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  • Shya
    June 28, 2008

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    Says a lot in very few words, but I'm not sure if this poem means anything. It's just a few lines of juxtapositions... it doesn't really have a message to convey to the reader.


  • Andantino gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    I agree with Ms Lamppa

    but some metaphor-lines are more appropriate than others.
    It was a pleasure to read your wee poem.
    Will.


    • Domz101
      June 11, 2008
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      cool, ;)ler, i got that

      thanks for reading, domz


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    This one just made me smile. A hotel in the grass. Short simple - point in fact. I loved it. ~Pamela


    • Domz101
      May 22, 2008

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      sweet!!!

      thanks and yeah - i was going for a title, continueum of the first line, to make it all fit - 25 words


  • Li snuffles
    May 20, 2008

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    a beach in antartica
    grass in a bong
    no shoes while walking

    -> as you do!

    I really liked this piece dominic.. very thoughtful and all round nice ness

    i liked how ye have it all spaced out as well babe

    Nice job...xxx


    • Domz101
      May 22, 2008
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      lol

      i like that - but grass in a bong isn'tall that unusual...lol, cheers for the mens!!!

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