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Go.Stop.Explode [it's raining saints and aliens]

So it seems like a tranquil sort of
training exercise that keeps
reverberating past thoughts in a cycle of
evolutionary blandness.

Step up.
Step down, soldier.

Keep telling yourself that they are your friends,
except on bad days.
Enemies from the start, with competitiveness
pushing you in a mindless direction to only
succeed in overtaking your beautifully challenged
beat down in pulsing forms of
ulcers contracting backwards into your stomach.

Idly I wait for another sliver of confusion to
look my way, while two feet away trains
drown out all thought
in the same spot where I just stood.



Now and again I lie, guaranteed by the tears I have promised not to shed.
Go on and say it, it’s
eating through your entrails.

Tilting to the side where the nerves were once
irking to feel again amidst
talk of being fake.

Oscar winning scenes of babies marching home
from the sandbox, reek havoc and
freeze my eyelids shut again.
My love, mixed in with AK-47s and
yours, couple with music notes.

Before, I wasn’t sure I could take it
and now I know I could never even start
calling out names to save me.


Kill.Eat.Die.Repeat.Kill.Eat.Die.Repeat.



Pop out your misused references and
look over your shoulder.
Everywhere you see concrete fortresses
armoured with camouflage.
Sauter your helmet onto your scalp
even in the shower, soldier.

Author notes

Almost everything piled in one.
Some hasn't come to be yet, but it has happened before and I stand with arms outstreched.

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Comments


  • WtfPancake
    September 14, 2008

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    I have three things to say

    1. This is amazing, my comments don't go very in depth but I really do think this is incredible

    2. Jesus Christ. Where do I buy an umbrella for this kind of storm!? If it's raining saints would such an umbrella be blasphemous?

    3. I lol'd HARD at the guy that commented this first NO OFFENSE TO YOU SIR. I just enjoyed the whole "I LIEK DA WAY U USE WERDZ" bit, thank you.

    that's it. keep writing awesome stuff like this.

  • Catastrophe
    September 13, 2008

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    Wow, this is so amazing. I love the way you use metaphors and the way you describe things. I love this.