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Fused.

Patience;

while the earth you found.

 

I ached, I grew

 

‘seek out your destination, discover what is true’

 

Bewildering battles you survived,

 

Enduring

             ‘breaking’ burdens,

              all to be with me.

 

Now

Inside my soul, your essence

rushes these rivers with mine

Losing all concept of

time,

         everything

         there’s only you.

 

In our loyal

consummation heavens

                                wake

to pleasurable cries

                               {sigh}

 

we breathe, contented

in this fusion

secure in such bliss.

Author notes

Hi Az, I put this one in, not becaause it's a gold winner but becuase it is a piece I am truly truly proud of ...and I dont see a comment from you so hopefully you havent read it

And I would be honoured to be your niece and you my Aunty




Pic credit --the God and Goddess of Wicca by ~yearningnight1031

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  • Weltt
    June 6, 2008

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    Stunningly beautiful and crafted with much thought and care. I can easily see why this won gold. Wow Cin, this was amazing!


  • azlyn gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    How beautiful this is!!! And one of my favorite pics too!!! I am honored to welcome you to my family and to be a pert of your Sweety!!! I love the poem...it touches my soul.

    Blessed Be~
    Aunty Az

    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      June 2, 2008
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      I had a feeling you would truly connect with this one...little did I know it was a fav pic heheh

      I was honoured to win gold...to place the love I feel for my man within this write was easy heheh but that picture inspired so many creative thoughts..if I could have written more I would have lol

      Thanks my new Aunty Az


  • sailor ptolema
    May 30, 2008
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    so great! LOVE LOVE the form!!!!!!!


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    It's so amazingly beautiful sweetheart. I could see into your heart with every word I read. Now you're the one making me cry tears of happiness at what I'm seeing.

    Your poetry is growing and maturing with everything that you write and I'm so proud of you. You have so much natural talent just waiting to spill out across the page.

    Congratulations on the most well deserved Gold.

    I love you
    Mum


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 23, 2008
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      Aw thank you mum, your words always encourage me and make me feel so proud

      U too

      Cin


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 22, 2008
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    Congrats on gold sis!! Definately worth it~!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    Yayyyy told you this was amazing!!!


  • Nighttime angel
    May 22, 2008

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    I ask you how can you not be happy with this. this is a great poem. you did an excellent job with the prompt.
    the first stanza is what I like the best.

    good luck

    kat

    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      May 22, 2008
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      I think its like I felt like some words seemed a bit long, maybe interuptting flow etc..but the more I read it myself I see I am being stupid lol

      Thank you so much for your comment
      Cin


  • Unsigned gold member
    May 21, 2008
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    Well I love this

    So very well done Poet...


    BB

    Simon

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 19, 2008
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    Sis!!! This is amazing!!! How can you not be happy with this?

    Wow... I adore this.. the message in it is wonderful and the way you have structured it and the word choices with subtle rhyming.. just gorgeous!!

  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    Wow I think that was so beautiful sis! For writing it at 3:30am you did one heck of an amazing job, eyes closing or not! Loved the imagery, left me breathless and your words fit the picture so perfectly like a puzzleGorgeous work hun!! Good luck in the contest


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    this is very piercing i think you did a very great job with your contest piece its like the perfect trap

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