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Yours Eternally

Missing image

Evening beckons as
I softly call your name
Loneliness creeps in
things will never be the same

The wind whispers as
it softly touches my face
Images of you appear
full of beauty and grace

Inside my soul breaks
in denial I can't believe it's true
You are bound for Heaven
and there's nothing I can do

We share a love
that will transcend time
Our hearts will forever

remain eternally entwined

Author notes

47. "The wind is low, the birds will sing that you are part of everything." -- "Dear Prudence" by the Beatles . I know you hate ryhming writes but I wanted to enter anyway if you don't like it please remove, I write from my heart and that is all that matters too me. thanks

Dedicated to my sister earthstar (Brenda) who recently lost her soul mate her husband suddenly. I wrote it from her aspect I hope you like it, Brenda I love you so much and your hubby will alway be with you "Just in another form" I love you sis

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  • ronnica
    October 19, 2008

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    "You are bound for heaven
    and there's nothing I can do.

    This is very close to me right now, beautiful reminisce, thank you for sharing,



    • tawk gold member
      October 19, 2008
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      Thanks for your kind words, they mean the world too me. You are always in my prayers and thoughts. hugs Theresa


  • Shassidy
    June 4, 2008

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    This is a great piece! I really like the rhyming and flow of this, and I'm glad you included the author's notes that you put in, it makes the story and poem feel more real and I can relate to it more with a story behind it. This is a very touching poem and, although it's short, it sure packs a punch. There's a lot of emotion in it, which I think is great because I usually find that rhyming things tend to lose their emotion due to a fast-paced set rhythm, but this one doesn't. I really can't pick a fovorite part out of this because I like it all a lot. I like how the last line ties in with the title as well because it makes the poem seem finished and it makes the title fit the poem well too. The title is a bit clichéd, but it reflects the ideas in the poem well, so it works well. Great job and good luck in the contest!

  • mcheadle
    June 4, 2008
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    The missed ones live on in our heart as long as we keep them there.

    This is a hard thing to do . You want to pull the back, just to say I love you....mac

  • mcheadle
    June 4, 2008
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    The missed ones live on in our heart as long as we keep them there.

    This is a hard thing to do . You want to pull the back, just to say I love you....mac


  • Princess-of-Chance
    May 25, 2008
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    wow Great poem so much feeling i love it!!!

  • Champagne Eyes
    May 25, 2008
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    Inspiration

    I love this write so much. You are an inspiration to me. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Oh thank you for your kind and wonderful comments. I wrote this for my ap sister earthstar who has recently lost her husband her soul mate. I did not realize my poem is in the spotlight until now I am so humbled that someone thought this much of my poem! Thanks again, Theresa


  • Shifting
    May 25, 2008
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    beautiful

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thank you so much I wrote it from my heart for my sister here on ap. She means the world too me, thanks again. Theresa


  • Harrisham Minhas
    May 25, 2008

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    Aww...that's touching.
    You have written a sweet poem to cheer up your friend.


    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thank you I hope it cheers her up she is so lost without her soul mate. Thanks for reading and the kind comments Theresa


  • undeadtrev
    May 24, 2008
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    Beautiful and heartfelt, simplistic wording and so powerful in it. Thank you for sharng


    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks for your very kind comments they mean the world too me Theresa


  • StarrieNacht
    May 24, 2008

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    This piece is full of love and lost and is felt with every word on this page you wrote. Thank you for sharing this with all of us here.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks for your beautiful comments they mean so much too me. Yes I hope it helps to comfort my sister just a little Theresa


  • Rainbowsprite
    May 24, 2008
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    That is so beautiful and touching, i really love it love Tab


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 24, 2008
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    What a beautiful tribute

    To Brenda and her husband's love, and to the deep love and empathy you feel for her.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks yes they are soul mates and will always be. I hope it helped her just a little she means the world too me and to so many others. Thanks for the wonderful comments. Theresa


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    May 24, 2008

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    wow this is fantastic, so touching and powerfully emotive! I loved it, great work and good luck in the contest, really masterfully penned blessed be xx


    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks for your kind comments they mean so much too me Theresa


  • tomisb
    May 24, 2008

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    The rhymes help make it feel more "as one" The gentleness feels as soft as a feathers touch and the ache catches the reader and leaves them hoping that love never dies and each lifetime will be rewarded with togetherness.
    Love, Tom B.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Yes that is how I feel our love never dies it lives on eternally. Thanks for your wonderful comments. Theresa

  • Kalamina
    May 24, 2008

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    your rhyming was well done, the word choice was simple, yet arranged in such a way that it brought a sweet gentleness throughout the poem. The reason that you wrote this was so neat too, i liked this.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks I write from my heart and soul whatever comes out is what goes on the paper. Thanks for your very kind comments Theresa

  • Flamecaster
    May 24, 2008
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    Great...good luck...


  • LittleMoon silver member
    May 24, 2008

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    This is so utterly beautiful and must of been such a priceless gift to Brenda and for all others who are the remaining half of a loving couple, waiting until they can be together again.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks for your kind and caring comments as always, yes I hope this poem helps bring a little comfort to her Thanks again Theresa


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    This was beautiful. Knowing that even in a person's passing, the love between that person and their "significant other" will still remain and their memory not forgotten. very well penned


    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Your comments mean the world too me, and yes their love will forever live on. Thanks again Theresa


  • earthstar
    May 20, 2008

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    It made me cry with tears of joy. His family loved him so much they did not leave any wreaths on his grave. It made me so upset. This made a bad day better there is so much to do. Thank you for making my day it made me feel better inside. Thank you so very much.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Dear sweet sister, I am glad that this poem touched you, I love you so much and wanted to help ease your pain somewhat I know I will never be able to take it away but I am always here for you. I love you so much Theresa


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    I read your note, and to dedicate this to a friend, whom has lost a part of her life, makes one think how lucky one is to be part of a family like yours, thank you for sharing and good luck in this contest...
    Lin

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      No I am the lucky one to be part of her family. earthstar, Brenda is such a caring and loving person and I am proud to call her my sister. Thanks for your very kind comments they mean the world too me Theresa


  • moonbumps silver member
    May 20, 2008

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    This was a beautiful write that touched my heart-encapsultes all-
    love Hilly


    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008

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      Hilly, as always thanks for your beautiful and caring comments they mean the world too me Theresa


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    This is so beautiful and emotional. Bless Brenda's heart. She is such a wonderful person. I know this will touch her deeply. Your heart really shines brightly in this poem.

    • tawk gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Thanks Jeannie yes Brenda is a wonderful person and I am so proud to be part of her family! Thanks as always for your kind and caring comments, have a wonderful day. Theresa

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