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fight like the brave

when you expell all thoughts and desires
that's when you get war
when you dream of nothing but hatred and mutiny
that's when you get war

fight like a man
live within the adrenaline
but you left oh so swiftly
will you come back to me?

I've known for years of your hurtful dreams
ever since middle school
your family legacy ruled above all
but you said you'd change for me

crying alone at night for my love has left me
but his thought's of survival overpower my own
This broken cause means nothing to this mind
as it lingers within itself alone and rotting

you dream about the day he'll come back
but a quick letter may prove his eternal slumber
left, left, left right left
it's all you imagine as he marches to his doom

when you expell all thoughts and desires
that's when you get war
when you dream of nothing but hatred and mutiny
that's when you get war

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  • BlackSwan
    May 22, 2008
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    Very ingenious lines right here...

    "left, left, left right left
    it's all you imagine as he marches to his doom."

    Also the beginning and ending stanzas which include the line "that's when you get war."

    Nothing good comes out of war and violence.

    Good write
    -Thank you for your entry, Angi Terese