A hurting soul unable to rest,
an empty life is the Devil's jest.
A singular beat, unanswered call,
an ageless hurt and a painful fall.
Accepting hate as distorted love,
you denounce your faith in God above.
Eroded feelings fill a dejected heart,
facing guilt of a blemished start.
Burning dreams spark exquisite flame,
yet a sleeping warrior reaps no fame.
Fragmented memories fail to last,
for empty shadows can hold no past.
Admonishing life, embracing death,
finding no pleasure in drawing breath.
Walking edge of forbidden thrills,
chasing liquid fire or magic pills.
Far horizons taunt a troubled soul,
when life demands an outrageous toll.
In a constant struggle, fight or flight,
fearing shadows yet avoiding light.
A contest entry
- Great Picture Prompt!!..(points updated)...The Sad Clown...This could be what they call a 'quickie' by lilmermaid.
800 points, ended May 25, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"Walking edge of forbidden thrills
within liquid fire or magic pills."
i absolutely LOVED this bit, and i can completely relate. you have an incredible gift for rhyme. the flow is so natural, and there is nothing at all forced about the rhyming. very nice work. keep it up!
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There is a lot of anguish in this poem. It seems to tear at the seams. Something in it makes me wonder what the author is thinking. Is this one about your own experiance? Empty shadows have no past, and fearing shadows yet avoiding light, are excellent.
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loved the flow of this
I think there is probably more to this than meets the eye though. Great work. -
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Oooh, niceness! Enjoyed the read and I hope that you do well in the contest!!
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You did an excellent job, and that last line carried the day lol and good luck in the contest lol
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... I found this write really sad!!!! It almost made me cry.. It's a wonderful write that was full of imagery that just blew me away.. I don't to say to much as I might start to babble, BUT this is great penning!! Keep it up and thank you for shareing!!
~*Cristy*~ -
Precious!
Every next line,was yet another delight..
yielding to hatred and rejection,accepting doom, lost hopes...Painful
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