Solemn shrubs of salep
Predicate palisades of peace
Wavy wisps of wisdom
Opacate odysseys of old
Bounding breadths of beauty
Irrigate interests of ink
Docile dew of dreams
Fecundate fantasies of foals
A contest entry
- Beautiful Peace by VoltaicHypnosis.
600 points, ended June 2, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks. ;)
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ooops haha... i'll try to enter another one... hopefully its better...
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Gorgeous alliteration displayed here - and magnificent images created with them. SImply gorgeous... best of luck!!
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interesting
I can tell it is about nature, but after that i'm lost. I like the fact that you used the alliteration because I haven't read a poem like that for a while, but it was hard to understand for me. A little too abstract.
my favorite stanza is:
Bounding breadths of beauty
Irrigate interests of ink -
This was definately fun to try to say and I love alliteration
but I didnt get a real sense of wholeness with this - seems a bit random.
I think each stanza could be used as a first line for 4 different poems!
This was definately refreshing though - if for nothing else than feeling like a breath of fresh air on a warm sunny afternoon.
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Excellent poem. It flows like a stream, meanders along, with each word seeming to have a breath of it's own. Shows how words can play games of their own, when they are used well.
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*speechless* Wow, this is beautifully amazing!!! I enjoyed every moment while reading this It portrays a relaxing atmosphere..
Great job!!!
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HMMM.. well I never!! This poem just blew me away! I'm still picking up the pieces of my mine!! This is an amazing free verse.....what blows me away is the alliteration!! I love love love it.. so simple yet has so much depth!! Keep up the great penning!
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Nice idea. Alliterative free verse. But because of its limits, it also doesn't go beyond being clever. Words alone don't make beauty; condensation, too, can take it away. I feel that is the case. Alone, the lines are nice; but as a whole, neither are supported by the other.
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This was somewhat different but very beautifully written... as i read it, it somehow seemed like there was a rythm to this poem! very nice!
Great flow and wonderful choice of words! simple and beautiful! keep penning words of brilliance!
~Ranji
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