You breathed simultaneously
with the echo of midnight
and these thoughts
tumbling towards vertigo.
I took a paper
and wrote no poetic value,
just to realize
how meaningless that is...
like I am.
Author notes
pff.
Please tell me what you think
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You are far from meaningless! I love you! I miss you so much, and I just wish that we could be close like we use to.
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Bandit appreciation! 9pts
Thank you for supporting The Poetic Bandits reading list, by contributing this meaningful poem...I'm so glad we don't see you as you see yourself
~Lilac
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Perhaps you should go to bed earlier? LOL. As others have said, not meaningless yet we can not get fully into the mind of the poet, the muse hits us in unexpected ways. Don't meander, leander.
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Very emotive quickie
You ran with it and succeeded. Thanks for the share!
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Awww I love the way your poem flows~
It's so perfectly done but one thing M sure you are certainly not meaningless
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Awww..
You are NOT "meaningless". Whoever makes you feel this way should be dismissed immediately. Poof! Get rid of them! But then, I know how love hurts, and how easy it is for someone else to tell you how to respond to deep set feelings.
A powerful work of words here lee. Great sadness screams its message to the reader. I have missed your poetic abilities, and astute presentation. Sorry for being away for so long.
Much Love Always ♥
Renee
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Very sad and self destructive thoughts. These emotions were conveyed very well. A short piece but poignant.
alby
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Such a sad piece. Its brevity adds to its lonely, hopeless tone. One suggestion I have is a little reworking of the last line of the 2nd stanza for clarity, perhaps exchanging "that" for "it", or maybe adding another word. Otherwise, the poem communicates well the dark emotions.
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Wonder if one can judge their own writing - it is best to let others decide what it means to them; each one carrying something away from the write - different from others. Was sure I had commented on this before, but cannot find it. Think we all feel like this at sometime in our life...a bad time for you to go through just now...
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You are not meaningless!!!! How could you say such a thing?!?! And like you said below you mean something to people. Therefore, you are very meaningful to them...and to us readers as well
I do see what you mean by thinking that you are useless (not to say you are just that I see where you are coming from as I tend to feel that way too...about myself, that is). But I think that comes from what you do with your life not your ability to be useful or not. I think you're just in a rut and you need to seek out areas where you can use your talents and skills and, in return, feel like you're doing something useful with your life.
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Nothing is meaningless unless you allow it to be. I know you have an inner vision to see things with the eye of an artist, be inspired by this and come out of your corner ready to write your next masterpiece. Write on my friend!
Dennis
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The first stanza was excellent and the second universal. Sometimes writers and parents feel this way--try getting more sleep, if possible. If not, hang on things get better!
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I'm sorry. I certainly hope you get out of the doldrums soon. Hopefully it's just a general thing and nothing too serious. We all have the former. I won't insult you by trying to persuade you that you are wrong. Just stop it!
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lol
thanks for your comment
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sometimes we all feel this way and as for me... it's a feeling i know all too well. sometimes i feel like a speck of nothing as if i've never done anything worthwhile and i don't matter to anyone. it's usually when i've been hit with another life blow or worse... more than one at once. and it hurts until something small happens that gets me to see that i am worth something.
i don't know you very well leander and we live miles apart. if i were there i would give you the biggest hug and tell you that i've been reading your poety since i joined this site five years ago... and that it's touched me. your poem 'gathering dust' is the only link i have on my page 
so you matter to me
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Thank you sweety
I just have millions of thoughts running through my mind since I listened to that trance song from ages ago - lol, and it got me thinking that I haven't reached anything more in life than ten years ago - besides the fact my body got grown up (and too hairy - lol - but that's too much information)
It's just... I feel useless, even though I realize all too well I mean something for quite some people, but still...
and I'd keep on rambling on just because I don't know how to express what thoughts I have
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Feeling down mijn lieve zon?
It is not you (or us) feeling meaningless, it is the moment when nothing seems to fit right, specially thoughts.
Your poem ends with a big lie, but you still make a lie reads so damn good (poetic speaking).
Hugs, that is what you need
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Feeling down... mmyeah
I don't know how to describe these thoughts
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I agree with Nicolette.
And yes, we do have moments like this...
sadly we do but thankfully they go away eventually.
So,dont let it kill you either
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Meaningless??? I know we have these moments, but you definately are NOT meaningless, my friend!!
There is so much in these lines - beautifully expressed. You are one talented poet, Leander.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you my friend
Unfortunately we all have these moments indeed
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